week 30 >Fountain of Rapture< *Revisited*

hi:)
next try:

A fountain of rapture

Scratching my ankle
Audiovisual madness
Struggling to strangle
The outpouring sadness

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When I raise my voice
It is no more to be listened to
Don't expect you to understand
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Clumsy figure time withstood
Make the words matter
To me, you could
Although I yielded to torture
It didn't beautify me /I was not beautified, I have
Never shown grace under pressure
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I wish I could
Make the words matter
But time withstood
Torture's needed to endure
Yet it failed me-
No grace under pressure

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When I raise my voice
It is no more to be listened to
Don't expect you to comprehend
When I raise my voice
It is not to join your song, friends you see
The melodies are new to me
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Average exchanges of affections
What did it mean the twisting of a mouth?
Is it worth the deception
Or do you already know me for what I am?

A fountain of rapture that's what I am
A drop for everyone who cares
A bucket for those who hold my hand
Ye Gods, isn't there anyone who dares
An ocean for those of you who pretend
Step forward, let's see what happens
When my longing comes to an end
“And the end is near”, they said
How true, the blood is shed.

-the red part is another version of the words before
-the orange part is a different version of verse 2
(hey dougjoy did you notice I tried to follow your advice?)
jamir, d'you think there's still grammatical errors in it? :wink:

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bluenightangel