this shoudl be a pretty straight forward song. I don't think the imagery is that difficult to understand but here is the overview. It is about a teenage couple, they think they are in love so they have sex. The girl becomes pregnant and the guy wants her to have the baby bu she has an abortion anyway. Shouldn't be too hard to follow. Not the greatest work but I was branching out from my normal writting style.
No More God
Love so strong but still so young
We're only 18 yet feel so right
Too much to go wrong
Too much to ever lose
Waiting should have helped ourselves
What happened to My Plans
When did these become just dreams
Held her in my arms for now
But as she left I let down
Cried no more God
Beauty held once still too blind
Blood runs stitches in my time
So much that we could lose
So much that we could gain
We should have held to our vows
What happened to My Plans
When did these become just dreams
Held her in my arms for now
But as she left I let down
Cried no more God
She left her hands full on Blood
Hanger and needle still soaked in time
She walked out the door that night
she was my prayer Unanwsered
No more God I cried
What happened to My Plans
When did these become just dreams
Held her in my arms for now
But as she left I let down
Cried no more God
and I still cry
let at night
and I still cry
I still cry
No more God
I was branching out from my normal writting style.
always a brave step to take but well worth the taking.
But as she left I let down
Cried no more God
I'd maybe change let to broke to emphasise his pain
She left her hands full on Blood
Hanger and needle still soaked in time
She walked out the door that night
she was my prayer Unanwsered
No more God I cried
What happened to My Plans
When did these become just dreams
Held her in my arms for now
But as she left I let down
Cried no more God
Good switch around in the last lines here has good impact.
Good stuff
Bob
You are what you eat, eat well
Dictator,
Haven't seen you around in a while it's good to
read your work again.
I like this alot! It took a couple of reads to full appreciate it
but was well worth the time.
I would second every thing Bob had to say including
the part about "let down" vs "broke down"
I think "broke" gives a much stronger impact.
Good Job
Celt
