VERSE
Sharp words
to go with your tongue
Light me up
and leave me to burn
Paralysing fear
Got nowhere to run
The heat's rising in here
You're having too much fun
BRIDGE
Do you think she has to notice
If I decide to die today?
I'll pick myself up off this playground
And throw my own ashes away
I'll get rid of all the evidence
You wont have to know or care
Just please don't kill me like this
With my broken hearted fear
CHORUS
I'm all fired up, I'm going up in smoke
A destructible blaze I spit fire and choke
You got me hot under the collar
Don't think I can cope
I'm all burnt out
Lying dead on your bedroom floor
VERSE
Passion turns
To flickering rage
You think I'd learn
Not to do it again
So I suppose I'll play you
At your own game
And see how you'd like
To dance in the flames for a change
REPEAT CHORUS AND BRIDGE
OUTRO
I'll wait till the dust settles on this
I'll wait till the dust settles on this
If one little lie is all it takes
To get me out of it
I wont hesitate
If one little lie is all it takes
To get me out of this
I wont hesitate
HI
I really like this song. It's got a story to tell which I always like and the imagery seems nicely in place.
The one place where I got a bit confused was in the bridge
First the narrator seems a bit suicidal, as though life wasn't worth living and he 'decides to die today' but then at the end of the stanza he is begging her not to kill him like this. I guess the song is more about the way that he feels he is being treated.
I love the outro, it has a really seedy, guilty feel.
Great song altogether
Beren
I'm one too many mornings and a thousand miles behind
yeah your right, it's actually quite a sexual thing..well it turned out that way when i wrote it and how people play sexual games with eachother and it can turn nasty
I'm starting to see a lot of anger in these songs. I guess these assingments are really beginning to spark some different feelings in our heads.
I really related to this song. At first, I didn't really know what it was about, maybe just mind games, but u mentioned that it dealt with sexuality and mind games, so I started connecting with it and I know exactly what you mean by this song. Loved it. Lots of fiery imagery, without being repeatitive. Nice touch. Sharp words
to go with your tongue
Light me up
and leave me to burn
I really liked this part. I also liked the last verse. Beat her in her own game. Great way to build up to the ending. Then, at the end, show how you can pull it off. Go out with a bang! Keep it up!
There's a thin fine line between hate and rage.
Now watch the line be crossed and break!
thank you for your comments! i've just posted a poem in the other forum that i worked quite hard on so please take a look if you can it would be appreciated as no one goes in there much anymore!
