Hello everyone, here are my selections for this weeks exercise. The post may be kind of long, so have some understanding. The examples submitted are written with the intent for sevral different forms, will attempt to briefly explain the thrust of the idea.
For the Celt, who always has something positive to say for everyone. A couple of variations of "Grace"
1.
Grace in your hair
Grace in your walk
Grace in your eyes
Grace in your talk
Grace me with your love once more
It is your grace that I adore
A crooning romantic jazzy kind of thing, think Harry Conick Jr., Frank Senatra etc.
2.
Grace to you my faithful one
For you desired to stay not run
There were no bounds to your giving
Because you sacraficed I go on living
Grace to you for all you've done
Grace to you O' faithful one
Something of a Contemporary Christian feel, reverent moderately slow rock edge. (Just the way this came out, not trying to imply anything, OK?)
For Portia, who was the first person to respond to my first post, your words of encouragement and praise I don't think that I have lived up to. "Fading Fast"
1.
I'm fading fast (I'm fading fast)
I'm fading fast (I'm fading fast)
I'm fading fast (I'm fading fast)
Oh no no no
I'm fading fast (I'm fading fast)
I'm fading fast (I'm fading fast)
I'm fading fast fast fast
Don't let me go
Fast Rock tempo with a tinge of blues feel, big female voice, think Tina Turner, Janice Joplin etc.
2.
The wiskey I am drinking
Helps fade the memory
Of the way that I was
The way I use to be
Fading fast is my ambition
Fading fast my dignity
Watch a little longer
Fading fast humanity
A brooding minor key type of song, moderate tempo, needing lots of vocal emotion expression.
nroberts, really liked this title, Had my fill, to my mind it was a bluse title. I hope I did it justice.
Had my fill want you to know
Had my fill I gotta go
Had my fill just need to say
Had my fill of you baby I'm on my way
nroberts, here was another one I thought had great potential. I took a country music sort of angle to this one. "She'l come back"
She'll come back
When I quit drinking
And stop telling lies
She'll come back
When I quit cheating
And I get a job
She said she'll come back
When Hell freezes over
I guess I'm out of luck
The last one I will submit is from Illicit. "The prayers of a dying athiest" Very interesting title, and quit a challenge to do justice to. I think I could come up with several versions of this title. Thanks Illicit.
The prayers of a dying athiest
Where ever do they go
Out into space
Or some other place
I think we'll never know
The prayes of a dying athiest
Whispers never to be heard
With no God in Heaven up above
To receive their final words
Later all.
Hey!! Who moved my cheese???
They say that only 1 song in 100 is good!?! I think I need a lot more scratch paper!!!
nroberts, really liked this title, Had my fill, to my mind it was a bluse title. I hope I did it justice.
Had my fill want you to know
Had my fill I gotta go
Had my fill just need to say
Had my fill of you baby I'm on my way
I like this one.
Hey!
There is some really good writing in this post. Really good.
Particularly:
The wiskey I am drinking
Helps fade the memory
Of the way that I was
The way I use to be
Fading fast is my ambition
Fading fast my dignity
Watch a little longer
Fading fast humanity
You could probably say more in the first half if you so wished - the 3rd and 4th lines are basically the same. Some thing like:
The wiskey I am drinking
Helps fade the memory
Of the stories I have written
Of the way I used to be
or something. It's fine as it is too, really.
Had my fill want you to know
Had my fill I gotta go
Had my fill just need to say
Had my fill of you baby I'm on my way
Simple - but effective!
Well done!
G
Listen Louder Than You Play
Hey Redrider, I liked " Fading Fast" simple and to the point ( I'm a simple man at heart LOL ) I found it wen't well with a delta blues or John Lee hooker type one chord rant 8) 8)
I also liked "She'll Be Back" -I'm Thinking OLD school trad. country --the dog
Redrider,
I don't know how I missed this post until now.
Thank You for your kind words and your treatments of Grace.
The only problem is ,if I follow the rules, I can't us either of them but
I did add "The Prayers of a Dying Athiest" to my list of possibilities
Take care
Celt
