hey. this has been kinda difficult for me.... wrote like 5 pieces- none of them really pleasing me. anyway here you get nr.4 and 5.
To no avail
The tape is rolling, I hear you nosing round
And no, no, it didn't work out
It didn't
My robotic gestures
My wandering thoughts
They move separately
And act as one
Upon
The landscape of your bitterness
Poaching in your heart's wilderness
And you can hardly focus on anything
My body writhing, too random, too distant
And no, dad, it didn't work out
This day- a waste
I laid it waste
As I did with you
And it began so beautiful
“It didn't†you yelled
And I agree
Wonder how that one came to me
And you see
The dust dragging behind reality
She's gone!
And won't return here.
Worm-eaten
Blame it on your psd
But your movements have gotten robotic
And everyone can tell where you'll place
That pawn next
See, your lungs work separately
The wandering of your body
Takes place only within
The ellipses you're drawing
You need to focus
But you're so attached to the landscape
Of your spawning brain; for once listen-
This land is barren
btw psd is an abbreviation for posttraumatic stress disorder.
you see, none of them is really good, but hey... :) I disliked 'robotic' anyway... :lol: at least I posted something.
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
With all due respect to your style of writing, which for the most part I enjoy.
You could have written anything and fitted the 5 words into it, as most of the stuff you write seems like a ramble.
Find all you need in your mind, If you take the time
Yup it was a difficult set of words to work with. Though i do like your lyrics none the less. they were interesting and i could picture a style of music to go with it. For how bad you thought they were they, they seems alright to me :)
Bluenightangel,
I know what you mean. Robotic is not a word I would choose to use on my own. Anyways I think you did a good job on To No Avail. It seems very much like your usual style of work . Nice job "robotic gestures" works well with the rest of the piece. Worm-Eaten on the other hand I just don't get at all even after reading it a few times. It could be me though sometimes my skull is thick.
Celt
hey ya.
most of the stuff you write seems like a ramble.
aye. amen to that;) (still most of the stuff I write has got a meaning/story/etc. for me, so at least to me it makes sense...)
thanks Guerilla Charlie:)
and also the Celt. glad one of them is acceptable.
as for 'worm-eaten'... there's not much to get there.. basically about someone driven by fears or even paranoia or sth. like psd and using that as an excuse for everything. while being consumed in the buzz his/her brain makes and in routinous actions(landscape, spawning, ellipses) which lead to nothing(this land is barren) he/she gets more and more predictable(everyone can tell where you'll place that pawn next).
so that was that.
thanks everyone for the comments:)
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
