Hey.. the last word has not yet been spoken on the title (if you can say it like that in English, too). Don't really know what to think about this one, definitely cost me some nerves :wink: Let's see what you think.
Wearing off Thursday
There is motion on the screen
But your eyes are adrift
And outside the sun's breaking down
For the fourth time this week
The clock's turned to the wall
But you can hear it
Muttering to itself much like
The thoughts in your head
The floor is cold on your feet
But you are busy
Stirring a porcelain cup
Empty but for tea leaves
Water is leaking from a crack in the ceiling
Gone is the morning of curled up sunbeams
Water is leaking from a crack in the ceiling
Shadows distracted your heartbeat
And now are eating at your eye-lids
Water is leaking from the ceiling
And movement, it seems overrated
cheers,
straycat.
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
Straycat,
I would never guess that English is not your first language. I think these are great lyrics but it seems you are facing the dilemna many of us face: to leave it unresolved (and let the listener's curiosity pull them in) or should you add a verse which offers some kind of resolution.
I have 5-6 songs in my book which have a similar lack of resolution.
hey :D
thanks, I'm working on it (my English, I mean) :lol:
i see what you mean about the resolution thing. this particular piece's saving grace is that it's about a state when you get nowhere, are indecisive or just plain numb.. it's not supposed to be leading anywhere :D sounds like a poor excuse, doesn't it...
thanks for the input. :D
cheers,
straycat.
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
