Thanks to Anne for the inspiration to this song . . . . . . . .
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CINNAMON MORNINGS
Somber thoughts on Cinnamon Mornings
signs on the horizon distant warnings
a glimmer of light that I can barely see
and I don't know what's happening to me
I can see you in the distance in the morning haze
and I don't know what to do, don't know the way
to touch your heart in a way that's real
control my emotions to show you how I feel
and I don't know what to do and don't know where to go
and the temptation pulls me to and fro
and I can't start over and I can't play make pretend
never felt this way before and I never will again
we're drifting on the horizon and riding the waves
magic in our eyes and there's nothing we need say
words go unspoken not a single sound
and yet the understanding is so profound
and in the distance something calls
the light of day beckons but the night time falls
and I close my eyes but I can clearly see
the direction ahead for you and me
cinnamon mornings and somber thoughts
play with my emotions but I won't get caught
we're holding on tightly and in this dance
doesn't matter the reason or circumstance
cinnamon mornings and apocryphal warnings
all that I care about is all that I will share
with you, holding you
with you, loving you
cinnamon mornings
Hi Neil,
Good start :D Great title! :mrgreen: Nice work on the mp3
With a title like that, it seems like you have a lot of latitude on what the song can be about.
Suggestion: Consider clarifying the singer's feeling toward the singee. Right now it comes across as quite confusing-
SINGER DOESN'T WANT SOMETHING TO HAPPEN -MAYBE FALL IN LOVE
Somber thoughts on Cinnamon Mornings
signs on the horizon distant warnings
a glimmer of light that I can barely see
and I don't know what's happening to me
SINGER WANTS THE SINGEE BUT THEY'RE NOT TOGETHER YET
I can see you in the distance in the morning haze
and I don't know what to do, don't know the way
to touch your heart in a way that's real
control my emotions to show you how I feel
SINGER WANTS THE SINGEE BUT THEY'RE NOT TOGETHER YET
and I don't know what to do and don't know where to go
and the temptation pulls me to and fro
and I can't start over and I can't play make pretend
never felt this way before and I never will again
SINGER AND SINGEE ARE TOGETHER NOW- MAYBE A DREAM? IF SO CLARIFY
we're drifting on the horizon and riding the waves
magic in our eyes and there's nothing we need say
words go unspoken not a single sound
and yet the understanding is so profound
SINGER IS NOT WITH THE SINGEE -WAS IT A DREAM? DID THEY BREAK UP? DID SOMEONE DIE?
and in the distance something calls
the light of day beckons but the night time falls
and I close my eyes but I can clearly see
the direction ahead for you and me
SINGER DOESN'T WANT SOMETHING TO HAPPEN -BUT HE IS WITH THE SINGEE
cinnamon mornings and somber thoughts
play with my emotions but I won't get caught
we're holding on tightly and in this dance
doesn't matter the reason or circumstance
SINGER DOESN'T WANT SOMETHING TO HAPPEN -BUT HE IS WITH THE SINGEE
BUT ONE OF THE TWO IS "PRETENDING" TO WANT TO BE IN THE RELATIONSHIP
Adjective: apocryphal
1. Being of questionable authenticity
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cinnamon mornings and apocryphal warnings
all that I care about is all that I will share
with you, holding you
with you, loving you
cinnamon mornings
So in the end, I really don't know what the relationship/song is communicating :?
Could you clarify a bit more?
Thanks for sharing.
James
James,
Wonderful critique! I really appreciate your time and comments. Great points and gives me superb direction on the rewrite.
Neil
