I think it was Week 34 when we were presented with the part 2 assignment
to make suggestions for other songwriters to step out of their usual safe
zone.Straycat put forth Conor Oberst of Bright Eyes as a challenge for me.
I've been sitting on this for a while and thought as Year 6 closes I might as
well put it out there.
I'm not sure how well I met the challenge but I'm definitely out of my safe zone.
Only Seventeen
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I remember walking you home
Late night conversations on the phone
Sneaking out behind the school to grab a smoke
Thinking we were cool
I remember holding your hand
Underneath the Planter's Moon
A kiss good night by Luna's sweet light
Falling in love with you
We were only seventeen
And you were the girl of my dreams
Only seventeen
I remember hanging down by the lake
Having too much fun
Running scared and running wild
Doing things we should never have done
We were only seventeen
And you were the girl of my dreams
Only seventeen
I remember that late summer night
You said there was someone new
I said “It will probably all work out for the best"
What was I to do
We were only seventeen
When you put an end to my dreams
Only seventeen
John
Hey there rebell :wink: (did you mean to write defiantly? or did you mean definitely :D )
I wouldn't have thought of Conor Oberst if I read your lyrics not knowing that'd been the challenge. But this definitely feels and sounds(!) different from what you usually write like. So you managed to get out of the comfort zone without copying someone else- thumbs up for that!
Btw I really like the sinister music! And you made the line “It will probably all work out for the best", which seemed a real mouthful to me, work great.
:D :D :D
Cheers,
straycat.
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
Thanks for the spell check and the inspiration!
Glad you enjoyed it. I never thought of the music as sinister
before you mentioned it. The chord progression came first on
this one and actually started out kind of bouncy. I guess it just
got darker as it went along.
What I was going for was a sense of resignation to the
loss of innocence the comes at the end of young love.
Thanks Again
John
