Slowplay, I think you're right that the lyric needs fixing to really get the idea across. The idea behind the song was to capture something of the co...

Actually, rereading this, the final line in the various stanzas should be "if we fell" (not as we fell) to catch the double meaning of the emotional a...

I thought the start of the first verse was terrific, and really (A) set the scene perfectly for the rest of the song, and (B) left me carrying away an...

Thanks, all, for the comments and suggestions. I have trouble writing protest songs unless (1) they're funny, or (2) they're personal, because I'm af...

Thanks, Vic Lewis and pbee.I like your fix, pbee, to make the song more general, while I could preserve the original lyric for the Christian market. ...

Thanks--and I like your fix for the line.SfDean