hey this is my second christian song i wrote for my youth group check it out on my soundclick site which can be found here, http://www.soundclick.com/spencerbeasley
it is the first song on the page entitled you simply are
You Simply Are
Copyright Spencer Beasley 2006
Im not quite sure
how you spoke into the sky and made the light
im not quite sure
why you chose to make man, knowing what we do surely isnt right
im not quite sure
why you chose to give your life upon that cross
im not quite sure
why you paid the ultimate cost, for me
and you gave everything
your the reason i sing
in a generation with such faults
your the constant the guiding light you simply are
Im not perfect
but youve given me everything, and i thank you for that
so i lift my voice in song
thanking you for recieving the scars that i should have
and you gave everything
your the reason i sing
in a generation with such faults
your the constant the guiding light you simply are
use me (4x)
guide me(4x)
and you gave everything
your the reason i sing
in a generation with such faults
your the constant the guiding light you simply are
well thats it lemme know what you think, real simple but it cmae from the heart.
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Hi, Spencer,
I struggled with some of the line lengths, and I'm not sure that the "use me/ guide me" bit adds a lot to it, but then I'm looking at it purely as a song not an expresssion of faith.
Best,
A :-)
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I like this a lot more than your previous Christian song. I don't think there is any part of the song that stands out as being weaker than the rest. It might be nice to change the structure a little though - I thought the first verse ("I'm not quite sure..." etc.) was very pleasing and it would be nice to have it repeated more than just once. Also I just noticed that the "I'm not perfect" part has "thanking" in it twice, whereas once might be better writing. Apart from that I wouldn't change much, I honestly think it is a very well written song (haven't listened to it yet though). Well done.
