Just a small nitpick, I don't really get the line "I got the sky of blue". I take it this is some kind of metaphorical expression like "I'd give you t...
Thanks for the pointers, James & Chris. You are probably right about the blanks thing not ringing true. I'm not attached to the verse so I'll rewr...
Hi Wilhelmina,I think you are improving week on week and this is a better song than your previous one (Without Your Love).Although, like that song, th...
I liked the idea but like others I was left wanting a little more detail about the events and characters in the song.In particular I thought the lines...
I think this works pretty well.This is what I'd call a "mixed bag of metaphors" type of song, in the same vein as Cole Porter's "You're The Top", Nat ...
Hmm, interesting. I'd say you have ample detail about setting, foods and characters, but something seems to be missing. All of the verses are anticipa...
I agree with the sentiment that this is a good'un.I'm not normally a fan of songs that take one idea and reiterate it over and over without much devel...
Hi James,I like your production on this track a lot. When you sing in a lower register it sounds a bit like Joy Division.I think the melody of the cho...
Sweet song.First verse is the best.Second is just ok.Third is a bit weaker. Not that keen on "please her / geezer".Fourth is nice.I would suggest that...
Pretty freaky! This song is about synaesthesia, yes, no, maybe?Unusual rhythms and unusual language.I like the images conjured up by the descriptions ...
"And dad wants you to know he won't say, "told you so!" Whatever you do... this line is about as confusing as the film Inception! :lol:Less is more...
I kind of agree with James about the song sounding like different characters. Are you a hometown boy, a roadtripper, or a party animal? Sure, it's pos...