Hi guys! I came up with tis song a month ago(just in the beginning of the autumn). It's a calm balld - acoustic guitar arpegious and a clean electric guitar solo in the end till it fades out. It doesnt have verses and choruses - its the same melody repeating over and over.
Cold Grey Day
There he was
Back in the streets
It was a cold grey day
The land was soaked
So were the trees
In the rainy day
The skies ain't blue
There was no future
Nor a sunlight ray
And there he stood
Before the lost profusion
Of the soaked gray day
So?You like it?
You may say I'm a dreamer
But I'm not the only one
This is truely different for me no verses or choruses , I read it again and again trying to imagine the musical arrangement you described , but I must admit I really thought it would sound great and the lyrics are strong and to me anyway seemed to flow naturally .
I say good stuff well done
cheers
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Thanks! I'll try to add an mp3 link soon. I'm facing some software problems.
You may say I'm a dreamer
But I'm not the only one
Hey George,
Without a chorus or something it just didn't seem to have any meaning to me.
I don't really understand what you're trying to convey. I think it's about a guy whos not really going anywhere or doesn't have a future, but I couldn't connect to any emotion.
Just my opinion, but it would be nice to know what brought him back to the street, the grey skies, etc. Why is he feeling this way?
I think you have some good ideas on here, and I know you wrote it to be a little different with there not being any chorus, etc., but I was left feeling like I didn't know anything more about this person other than he was standing there in the rain.
Good start here, just want to see more in it.
Greg
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