I was driving back late one night
Knowing you would not be home
The traffic lights hurt my eyes
And my heart hurt cause you were gone
And I thought to myself if I just let go
Of the wheel who would be there to know
Would darkness come and the lights go out
Or would I save myself and take control
Chorus:
A bit of myself disappeared that day
When you took yourself away
Would you come back if I begged you
Or is it too late, will you stay away
The cold air breezed in through the window
Dimmed the rad :o io and hit my soul
My heart stopped aching and time stood still
As I carried on driving home
Bridge:
And the devil spoke in my ear
He said to me don't be sad
Just release your control and I'll save your soul
And you will have me for company
A bit of myself disappeared that day
When you took yourself away
Its too late to come back if I begged you
Cause I am lying here all alone
© Florence Donovan
HEY FLO,I LIKE THIS A LOT ITS REALLY GOOD, I LOVE YOUR VERSE..
and I thought to myself if I just let go
Of the wheel who would be there to know
Would darkness come and the lights go out
Or would I save myself and take control
genius! lol keep it up....gaz
"people laugh at me because im different...i pity you..because your all the same"
How sad (and I mean that in a good way)
I really enjoyed the writing.
Good job
I don't think I'm a lot dumber than you think that I thought I once was - White Goodman (Dodgeball)
Thanks guys- I just sometimes feel my writing is really trite- like when I listen to some songs by people like sheryl Crow or say U2 (esp. the song stay) I feel like I am writing rubbish!
Listen to Sammy Hagar sometimes!
You'll think you are a genius :D :lol:
I don't think I'm a lot dumber than you think that I thought I once was - White Goodman (Dodgeball)
Works for me
A :-)
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Nice very nice bit of writting
I love the bridge
it fits really well
Good writting 8) :D :D :D :D :D
Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
Hi there,,did you ever listen to a good song lyric and wish you were clever enough to be able to write like that?!
I wish I wrote it!.... nice going....... write on :) cooker
You can sleep when you`re dead!
"and baby all you need...is just a little more love"
Great song! I put it to a slow beat that picked up in the chorus. If that's not what you planned, than do it your way. This was a great piece of writing and I really don't have anything to improve it!
Keep it up!
There's a thin fine line between hate and rage.
Now watch the line be crossed and break!
Am reallyt glad you are enjoying it! I have put it to a waltz like beat- 3 4 time which picks up in the chorus (as you said)
:lol:
Happy Christmas to you all.
ok this gonna sound weird... but do you mind if i print this and sing it to my girlfriend?
It's 15 Till And She Has The Other 45 In Her Mouth.
Not at all- have fun
