Empty Closet
Run away from the pain that's kept me here for so very long
I don't understand why it had to be me
There is only one way
Take my heart and be on my way
All I ever had, was someone and it was you
You left me all alone and without a clue
I searched my whole life for someone like you
I have to go away
This seems to be the only way
You shut me off
You said I'd never change
Being alone has never been so strange
My life was torn apart
You can't even look at my broken heart
All I ever had, was someone and it was you
You left me all alone and without a clue
I searched my whole life for someone like you
I have to go away
This seems to be the only way
You beg me to take you back
I can't, you destroyed my life and that's a fact
You can't expect me to forgive
When I lost the will to live
All I ever had, was someone and it was you
You left me all alone and without a clue
I searched my whole life for someone like you
I have to go away
This seems to be the only way
I can't seem to let the pain go
Even at night when I stare out the window
No matter how much you tried
I will still never let you back inside
All I ever had, was someone and it was you
You left me all alone and without a clue
I searched my whole life for someone like you
I have to go away
This seems to be the only way
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Hi'a
Welcome to the forum
This song has a lot of potential, but try to make it a bit more poignant by taking out the little un necesssary words for example :
Run away from the pain that's kept me here for so very long
I don't understand why it had to be me
There is only one way
Take my heart and be on my way
All I ever had, was someone and it was you
You left me all alone and without a clue
I searched my whole life for someone like you
I have to go away
This seems to be the only way
Try and rework it a bit and I'll give it another read ok, and try to find a few more expressive adjectives, remember you are painting a picture in words here, make me see the picture ok,........but saying that a great first submission, it has a good meter, simple lyrics although they are pretty predicable :( but then these type of songs always do well as we have all been there and can relate to them.
Go well
Ja'mir
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