Nashvilles not my home

I like this song, a song I could hear on radio. The words flow well.
He said I aint never been to Hollywood
And I don't intend to go
I spent some time in Nashville
And found out Nashvilles not my home

The only thing I might suggest is at the beginning of line 2 and 4(chorus) to take out "and". Not hearing the music it probably fits just fine, but I don't think you need it, just by reading the lyrics

He said I ain't never been to Hollywood
I don't intend to go
I spent some time in Nashville
Found out Nashvilles not my home

Just a thought? :D Good job!

Thanks for the input. I do believe you are right. Take care. Nite.........

good lyrics, runs smooth and gives a good picture

Thanks for the reply Mystic. I made some changes .

Writer Ken Lillie
©2004 Nashvilles not my home

I met him at a wayside
Sitting under a big oak tree
I offered him a dollar
For directions to nashville Tennesse

He slid his weathered hat up.
Said son it aint that far
But I've seen more people fail there
Than become a country star

He said I aint never been to Hollywood
And I don't intend to go
I spent some time in Nashville
And found out Nashvilles not my home
But it dosn't matter what I say
I see your going to go
Just remember your one of many
Trying to make it to the big show

I handed him a dollar
And he tucked it in his coat
He grabbed his beat up guitar case
And slowly turned on down the road

I spent three years in Nashville
And never cut one big song
I stayed as long as I could
Just to prove that old man wrong

Now I am at a wayside
Sitting under a big oak tree
When a young fellea offers me a dollar
For directions to Nashville Tennesse

I aint never been to Hollywood
And I dont intend to go
I just spent three years in Nashville
And found out Nashvilles not my home
Now I ain't gonna discourage you
Cause I see your gonna go
Maybe you'll be the lucky one
That makes it to the big show

Excellent...Excellent...Excellent!!
You help my interest through the entire song. I loved it!

Yes, I think the new ending is more satisfying (though I was kinda partial to the line about wishing for his dollar back).

Thanks slowplay,yeah I liked the part about wishing for a dollar back to.I still trying to figure a way to incorperate some how. Thanks again Nite.......

i think i like version one better verse #6 line 2 might sound better if you took out sitting

now Im at a wayside
under a big oak tree
when a young fellea offers me a doller
for directions to nashville tennesse

i do like the last verse in version 2 better

i aint never been to hollywood
and i dont intend to go
i just spent 3 yrs in nashville
and found nashvill aint my home
now i aint going to discourage you
cause i can see your going to go
maybe you will be the next one
that makes it to the big show

good luck and don't tamper with the good things in life!!

Thanks for the input again Mystic, I think I'll toy with this a little yet. Thanks again Ken................