hey everybody this is my new song that has a bouble meanign because it can be about a person or it can be about what i actually wrote it about, which is the feeling of longing again, its pretty old but i just stumbled across it and decided to put some music to it. i hope you all like it, it can be found on my soundclick page here.
sry those old links didnt work go to my actual soundclick site here http://www.soundclick.com/spencerbeasley
Hey misses unpredictable
what are you doing in that corner
girl you look so pretty like
the sun sinking so fast in scarlet skies
so come out its ur turn to shine
hey misses unpredictable
can i please get your number
i promise not to call
at any sort of incovenient time
but if i called would it be alright
and i didnt mean for it to happen this way
but your on my mind every single day
miss unpredictable i dont even know who you are
except when i wish for you upon a star
hey misses unpredictable
how have you been since that last break up
did he treat you right
if it were me youd be on top of my world
light years couldnt keep us apart
and i didnt mean for it to happen this way
but your on my mind every single day
miss unpredictable i dont even know who you are
except when i wish for you upon a star
hey misses unpredictable
can i please sing you a song
the words come from my heart
and the soul comes from this old guitar
then maybe you wont get to far
and i didnt mean for it to happen this way
but your on my mind every single day
miss unpredictable i dont even know who you are
except when i wish for you upon a star
hey misses unpredictable
i hear that your leaving for good
i wont forget you pretty
i wish you wouldnt leave but if you have to go then go
maybe your song will guide you home
maybe your song will guide you home
chec out my music
http://www.myspace.com/spencerbeasleymusic
pm if u like it or send me a message on myspace
k normally i wouldnt do this in fact i am going to be a hypocrit because i hate it when other people do it, but aside from the echo in weird spots cuz i know that needs to be fixed but can i please find out what you think about it.
chec out my music
http://www.myspace.com/spencerbeasleymusic
pm if u like it or send me a message on myspace
Nice song, I like the images in it. For example:
the sun sinking so fast in scarlet skies
so come out its ur turn to shine
I listend to the recording. It's good too. There is something about the tone of your voice though. It seems kinda bright for the song. Though I like the tone on these lines:
i promise not to call
at any sort of incovenient time
Great lyrics and strumming.
It's too consistant, and too long for how consistant it is.
Try to break the song up with parts that are completely different from the rest of the song. It'll help in keeping peoples attention. Because you don't want to just make music people like the sound of, you have to also keep them from getting bored.
Keep it up :D
"Like the coldest winter chill. Heaven beside you. Hell within." -Jerry Cantrell
thank you to you both, i was wondering if the tone was to bright as well, ill have to do some reworking on it. and i was also worried about the length ill try and write some new guitar parts for different verses to change it up a bit.
chec out my music
http://www.myspace.com/spencerbeasleymusic
pm if u like it or send me a message on myspace
beans....I think the lyrics to this are "good enough"....when I read them and your description, I got 'it"....My only suggestion would be to add a different emotion to your guitar playing ...I understand the "longing'....but in my opinion this song cries for uptempo... SHOUT IT OUT..with your guitar....(it`s "good enough") ....I sometimes take a song I`ve written as X and play it as Y......try it,you might like it!...cooker
You can sleep when you`re dead!
"and baby all you need...is just a little more love"
I agree with Saber, the song is basically the same rhythm and tone of voice all the way through. Strong playing & singing, but not enough variety.
I think there is a little too much repetition too what with three choruses and each verse beginning with the same line.
And finally, this is getting picky but you need to make it clear whether you are singing about "mrs unpredictable" or "miss unpredictable" because I think you used both and it could make a difference in how the song is interpreted (personally I think you should change it to "miss" throughout the whole song).
That's quite a lot of criticism but I did like the overall theme of the song and it was performed with passion.
