Hello everyone
I usually write in SSG , but I am suffering from a bad case of
NO IDEAS FOR THIS WEEKS ASSIGNMENT ..
So this is what blurted out of my mouth as I fiddled around on my guitar
I have titled it Socially Dead
For it's early to rise
And It's early to bed
It'll keep you healthy
But socially dead
Too much of that
Will send you blind
Eat pleanty of carrots
They're good for your eyes
They say an apple a day
Will keep the doctor away
I would rather some booze
So baby what do you say ?
For it's early to rise
And It's early to bed
It'll keep you healthy
But socially dead
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All feed back bad or good is welcome , I'll try to record this soon
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Well, it's actually quite nice if you'd ask me. In my head it's kinda like an Eric Clapton accoustic bluesy song, what do you have in mind for this?
Thanks Arjen
Open chords in the key of "C" ..
I was playing around with
Something along the lines of
( G) ............ Am
For it's earlyto rise
(G) ........ Am
And It's early to bed
And so through the Chorus
Em and C through out the verses
accoustic bluesy sort of beat to it
( Clapton I wish my friend but I know what you mean )
Thank you for the feed back
Hilch
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Sounds good to me Hilch!
Now, where's that guitar, I need to play this one..... :)
Pete
Hi Hilch,
this is quite cool really. Im not that keen on the carrot line though,: as a suggestion
Too much of that
Will send you blind
Whats good for your soul
May not be good for your eyes
I love the chorus, I was having a play around with those chords and as I was singing the song I kept wanting to draw out the s-o-c-i-a-l-l-y. Something like this.
For it's early to rise
And It's early to bed
It'll keep you healthy
But s-o-c-i-a-l-l-y, your dead
Good song mate
Cheers
Paul
I didn't expect to get so much feed back from this little number thank you all ...
When I sing it in my head
( not too sure if I should sing it out loud as we don't have any ear plugs left :lol: )
The last line on the chorus :
But socially dead
I actually sing it rather fast and dead is ended quite abruptly ...
Thanks Pbee and Pete
Hilch
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
I actually quite liked the carrot line. It's crazy, kinda reminded me of some weird but awesome Radiohead lyrics.
"Whats good for your soul
May not be good for your eyes"
It's nice as well, but more generic, somewhat bland. The carrot line contains a stronger picture to me, it sounds more sarcastic and bitter. But hey, just my opinion. :)
I better come clean with that verse for everyone I thinks ..
Too much of that
Will send you blind
Eat pleanty of carrots
They're good for your eyes
Too much of that will send you blind .. Well that is a saying where I live I don't know about other parts of the world ..Umm nicest way of putting it would be self gradification mm do it too much you will end up blind ..
Eat pleanty of carrots they're good for your eyes is also a saying .. But this time I have it in a tongue in cheek manner to annul the blindness ...
It is suppose to be poking fun at some of those sayings I have heard over the years ...
Hilch
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
They're the same in Dutch alright. :D
I played around with this and pinched Pbee's lines and added more to it now it has become a Adult theme song ..
For it's early to rise
And It's early to bed
It'll keep you healthy
But socially dead
Too much of that
Will send you blind
Whats good for your soul
May not be good for your eyes
Burnt all of your bridges
With all of your lies
Now your all alone
With your lying eyes
For it's early to rise
And It's early to bed
It'll keep you healthy
But socially dead
You did her wrong
It didn't take you long
Now you help your self
You don't care if it's right or wrong
Never married never alone
For Mr bates , he does not wait
She was only one to love you dear
Now only Master Bates lives here
For it's early to rise
And It's early to bed
It'll keep you healthy
But socially dead
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
hilch,
Inspired!
Maybe you could craft on this verse a little:
Never married never alone
For Mr bates , he does not wait
She was only one to love you dear
Now only Master Bates lives here
Being a little less obvious with the insinuation could be more intriguing. Let the listener puzzle it out a bit.
arjen wrote: it's kinda like an Eric Clapton accoustic bluesy song
Agreed.
Margaret
When my mind is free, you know a melody can move me
And when I'm feelin' blue, the guitar's comin' through to soothe me ~
Thanks Margret
I have got a lot of feed back about that verse you mentioned , and decided after reading you comments I thought to re-visit it ( thanks )
Never married never alone --------------- I LIKE THIS
For Mr bates , he does not wait ----------- WHAT I THOUGHT COULD GO
She was only one to love you dear--------UNDECIDED
Now only Master Bates lives here----------MUST STAY
So with that in mind this is what I came up with :
Never married but never alone
Living there in your twilight zone
Your getting older with every year
Master Bates , are you still living here ?
Just my latest ideas on that verse ...
I think it is a tad better
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Hey Hilch,
yeah getting better, i agree.
Never married but never alone
Living there in your twilight zone
Your getting older with every year
Master Bates , are you still living here ?
for my money though I think Id still tweak the last line to some thing like this
Never married but never alone
Living there in your twilight zone
Your getting older with every year
Yet Master Bates, still lives here
The reason why I would do that is because to me it validates and gives closure to the 3rd line . Just my thoughts.
Well your nearly a Denizen, I am unworthy to grace the same page, and swear fealty to my leige :lol:
cheers
Paul