Here are my newest lyrics
Spring will come across the sea
Did winter make an end
For what was about to stay
I can't see you
But I know you're not away
Will you be back next year?
I wonder every day
Now I have to go
There's no reason left for me to stay
And even tough I won't see
Spring will come across the sea
And your face will flourish
Like sunbathing flowers in the spring
Waiting for what summer will bring
Thinking about how the sun will be
But first
Spring will come across the sea
I know you'll be back
But for now you're away
For now I'll be gone
But I now I'll see you one day
And even tough I won't see
Spring will come across the sea
And your face will flourish
Like sunbathing flowers in the spring
Waiting for what summer will bring
Thinking about how the sun will be
But first
Spring will come across the sea
Good. I like it, mostly, that is I can't find any word or line in particular that I don't like. The one thing I would say, is that all the verses seem to say the same thing. It would be nice if they said different things or told some kind of story or progression of thoughts or feelings. With the verses you're basically using 12 lines to say what could be said in 4 or 5 lines. You should try to be more compact with getting your ideas across, then you would have room to give the song more depth.
