Long, long time since i've been here, it's had to have been 4 months, finally got out of school so i thought i'd post a song here since what you guys think, i wrote this like last month, I don't have a name for it, if anyone has suggestions, and if you would like an Mp3 of it i could record it and then someone could walk me through on how to post it here, cause i have no idea how, so ya here is the song.
He sits and wonders,
And thinks about the girl,
That takes up all his time,
And revovles around his world,
She is all he sees,
And he sees the world in her,
So why's he so afraid,
To tell her that he loves her?
There's no looking back once you're gone,
And if it goes astray, life will all go wrong,
So why's he still afraid,
Why don't you take a chance,
Cause you never know…
You never know what the future could hold,
And if you're so afraid,
Why don't you lock yourself in your room,
Why even take a chance?
When life could go all wrong,
But it's a risk he's gotta take,
Cause everything he doesn't see,
Is that she feels the same about him,
And she wants him to be…
A fire who doesn't die,
When she's cold, and scared, and lonely,
She wants to fall asleep in his arms,
Every night and feel his holding,
Of warmth and strength,
To not let her fall,
Why can't he see,
That this all…
A problem that he faces every day,
He sees her constantly,
And he wants to tell her so bad,
But every time he tries,
He either gets tongue-tied,
Or just says hi,
Or walks away without saying goodbye,
She doesn't understand,
How could it be so hard,
It's not her responsibility so far,
And all she sees is…
You never know what the future could hold,
And if you're so afraid,
Why don't you lock yourself in your room,
Why even take a chance?
When life could go all wrong,
But it's a risk he's gotta take,
Cause everything he doesn't see,
Is that she feels the same about him,
And she wants him to be…
Rejectedagain
It looks like a pretty good song to me and would love
to hear it.
Many of us use SoundClick for posting MP3s the link
below should bring you to the sign up page. That's the
first step. From there follow the directions If you run
into any problems don't be afraid PM or post your questions
Someone is always willing to help
https://www.soundclick.com/community/NewSignup.cfm?Band=Yes
John
Thanks, I'll get it all set up and then i should have a recording up by later tonight, hopefully. if not then tomorrow so you can check it out.
I have a question, how do I load songs to the page?
Here is the Mp3 of the song, comment on how it sounds, i think it's pretty good.
Very Nice Indeeed !
8)
Thanks, and you will be hearing a few more songs of my mine later on, if you choose to hear them. but again thanks for taking the time to hear it and everything.
Anyone else, wanna take a listen at it, just feel free to. you know you want to... :D
Rejectedagain
I'm glad I could be of some help. I figured if I could do it
anybody could. I meant to return sooner and give some
more in depth comments on your song but got involved
in recording and posting one of my own.
Anyways I like you song and it is a good example of why
posting MP3s is a good idea. At first I might have made
some suggestions to change a line or two. Not after listening
though. What you have works very well with the music
you used. Now that you started you may find posting MP3s
a little addicting. So be careful.
I do most of my writing and posting in Sunday Songwriters
Group (SSG) and find it a great way to improve your craft.
You should give it a try sometime.
I'll keep an eye out for your stuff
Keep Writing
John
Hey Rejectedagain,
I think you are going to have to change your nickname mate coz this song is far from being subject to that kind of behaviour :D. This is great well done. I really like the way you have broken the song up musically, I think those quiet bits work well and provide some relief, much like a bridge would do. Good work. As John says, Sunday Songwriters is a great place to hone up on your writing skills.
Cheers
Paul
Hey. Well, it didn't take me as long to come see yours as I thought it would - I'm skipping a class to do it, but it was so worth it! That's an awesome write, beyond anything I had originally expected actually......not to mention you can sing. Hmmm. Actually, I was wondering, this may seem like a stupid question, but I just don't know and really want to be sure. Is that you or a friend playing guitar? ...Anyway, Like I said, I'm skipping class, so I've gotta go just as quickly as I came. Really nice job! (I think I'm inspired to go write another of my own :)) Talk later. Best wishes. -Stefhy
I know it wasn't reason,
That made me do what wasn't right
but sometimes my heart falls prone
to the nature of your spite.
Thats me playing the guitar, i write chords and lyrics and sing all my songs, on a couple of songs i have i do have my brother playing back-up but for the most part it's all me.
Hey
Love the MP3 very Oasis I think ...
well done
Hilch
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
