Its been a while since i have had any thoughts for a song, here is my latest one, hopefully recording this one soon, the lyric tune are similar to the lyrics from Talk by Coldplay, (was listening to the song before i wrote it) please leave any comments/suggestions
Thanks
Waiting
Its dark outside
At four in the afternoon,
I can't decide
On what it is I'm gunna do,
I watch the sky
As I'm thinking of you
And time goes by,
As I wait for you…
Time can't change
What we have made
Only step aside
When we have realised
Its cold outside
As the wind begins to blow
I can't decide
How long it will be when I go
I'm thinking hard,
How long will it take till this will show?
My mind gets scarred
As I wait for you….
If you come today,
At four in the afternoon
My heart will sway,
To the happy things that we will do,
I will always say,
Every time that I love you
But I will stay
As I wait for you….
Thats pretty good, it looks like a song by Fall Out Boy or Blink 182.
all in all.....good job!
Thanks, does any one else have comments or improvements?
Hi P-P
Very lazy when I have to type ( hope you don't mind )
Have a little tweek for you
I watch the sky
As I'm thinking of you
And time goes by, <--------------AS TIME GOES BY
As I wait for you <--------------I'LL BE WAITING FOR YOU
On what it is I'm gunna do, <----ON WHAT IT IS I'M GOING TO DO
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Time can't change
What we have made <----------------WHAT WE HAVEN'T MADE
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Now these are only suggestions I took my time and looked at this several times before posting a reply
I even put chords to it .. hope you don't mind but my alterations seem to flow a bit better ( all open chords ) with a easy D/d/u/u/d STRUM
------C-----D
Its dark outside
---------C------G-------
At four in the afternoon,
-C-----D---------G------
I can't decide
------C----D--------G------
On what it is I'm gunna do,
D-----------C-------
I watch the sky
----G--------------D----
As I'm thinking of you
------C---------D------
And time goes by,
---D----------C---
As I wait for you…
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Hope you get the idea in between the verses add a little riff ( i used EM - C - G-D )
it's a very good piece of writting
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