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Noise in the Kitchen
I heard a noise in the kitchen
Another restless night in bed
But there's no noise in the kitchen
Just the noise inside my head
I heard a noise in the kitchen
I know it's not what it seems
And though I try not to listen
It haunts me in my dreams
And I think it was Monday
When I woke up to the light
And I thought I'd finally found a way
To make it through the night
But no I
Can't forget
You
No matter how I try
To
And every noise
In the dark
Sounds like
Your voice to my heart
Oh how did
I forget
To
Show all that mattered was
You
How could I ever think your voice
Was just another noise
I heard a noise in the kitchen
I sat up in my bed
Can't recall how long it's been
With all this noise in my head
Another noise in the kitchen
It was the last place I saw you
Just your voice in the kitchen
Tellin' me we're through
And yeah I think it was Monday
When I woke up to the light
And I thought that maybe finally
I'd make it through all right
But no I
Can't forget
You
No matter how I try
To
And every noise
In the dark
Sounds like your voice
To my heart
Oh how did
I forget
To
Show all that mattered was
You
How could I treat your voice
Like just another noise
Oh no I
Can't forget
You
No matter how I try
To
And every noise
In the dark
Sounds like your voice
To my heart
And now I
Try to hold on
To
The memory of
You
With every noise
In the dark
But it tears me apart
Yeah every noise
In the dark
Tears me apart....
That's great Joe! Well done. 8)
From little things big things grow - Paul Kelly
HI Joe
Yeah I agree with Bennett here as well ( Great Job )
Just a side note though , I read this a few times and I suppose it's how you sing it with melody and music etc ....
but this sounded a tad better ( just an offereing )
Thought I heard a noise in the kitchen
Another restless night in bed
Was there any noise in my kitchen
Or was it just the noises in my head
Just an idea ...
What you have is really good
Hilch :?:
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Hey Guys,
Hilch, thanks for the suggestion. I had to read it each way a few times 'cause your way sounds good, too, but I knew there was a reason I wrote it the way I did (sometimes I have to remind myself). Your way conveys me hearing an actual sound and wondering if it's her or not--that's great, nice, just not what I meant. When I hear noises in the kitchen I already know it's not really her, and just my own regrets keeping me up at night.
And I'd thought about saying "noises in my head" rather than "noise in my head" 'cause I liked the way that sounded, too, but it conveyed a slightly different meaning as well. "Noises" refers to all the sounds I'm hearing. "Noise" encompasses all the emotional crap that's in there, too.
I like it your way, too. It's just different than what I meant. Sometimes I go back and forth adding a word or suffix, deleting a word or suffix because that tiny change can change the meaning. Usually (definitely tonight, or I wouldn't have had time to post this week at all) the initial song comes pretty quickly. It's the going back and forth with the little words and suffixes that's the most time consuming. And sometimes even when I think I've got it the way I want it, someone here suggests a simple word change that makes it even better. Or just reminds me of why I chose to do it a different way. Anyway, now that I've used up all my break rambling (I really miss Chris--he usually took care of all the waffling) I've gotta go fail a test--err take a test. Have a good one.
Joe
Hi Joe,
well done mate this is good. I especially like this bit
And I think it was Monday
When I woke up to the light
Thought I'd finally found a way
To make it through the night
or even
And I think it was Monday
When I woke up to the light
And I thought I'd finally found a way
To make it through the night
Im going through a "I like illiteration in songs" phase at the moment . As always I am forever hopeful that I might get hear some of your stuff.
cheers
Paul
Thanks, I like it. Oh, hang on, I've got it that way the second time, don't I? All the more reason to change it. Thanks Pbee.
As for hearing me, I'm working on it Pbee. I'm hoping to have a little time after next week. Hopefully my "band" will have time to get together. We recorded a couple of songs but we're working with some new equipment and haven't quite worked out all the kinks (in ourselves either) so I'm not happy with the way the recordings came out. I'm pretty good with the arrangements, it's just the recording themselves--we must've had the levels wrong when we made the masters so they're not as clear as they should be. But each time (which unfortunately isn't often) we get closer. So maybe sometime this summer I'll be able to start posting some songs. Thanks for taking an interest. Hope it'll be worth the wait.
Joe
Hi Joe
Great stuff - hard to add to what everyone else has said - just think this works realy well. Good idea behind the song as well.
bob :wink:
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