Postcards.........
Hello Sarah,
having a good time,
but I wish you were here...
I know we haven't known each other so long,
But I'm missing you so much,
It's hell, being away from you,
And being out of touch,
But I'll be back in a week or so,
Seems a lifetime away,
I can't wait to get back home,
Can't wait to see your face....
Hello All,
Having a great time,
So glad we're here........
The hotel's fine, the weather's great,
Going to see a show tonight,
We picked a great place for a honeymoon,
To start our new life,
Sarah says she misses you all,
I'm inclined to agree,
Can't wait to get back home,
Too hot out here for me.......
Hello Sarah,
can you give me a call,
I wish you were still here......
Can you let me know, how are the kids,
Hope your mum and dad are OK,
God I wish I could turn back the clock,
As far as yesterday,
Can you send me some pictures,I miss 'em so much,
I miss you too,
I'm so sorry it all went wrong,
What are we going to do.......
Hello Vic,
Just writing to say,
Don't call or write....
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
hey vic,
just wanted to reply real fast.
:cry: :cry: :cry:
how sad. i was worried that it wasn't going to be all the great. but then i got into it and realized what the story is. the last two post card were really sad, and the ending hit me hard. the sentiment and feelings are right on. back to your usual high level. i knew it would happen again. will comment more later. wanted to get my first thoughts out right away.
-CheapThrill
hi vic.
just writing to say I like your song.
did I understand it right, first verse is you, second verse is her new husband, 3rd verse is you again and the end is sarah?
love the concept of the postcards of different people but all linked together. and their beginnings do make a chorus, kinda...right?
I'm sorry for you, it's so sad....
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
er - not quite Anne.......
First verse, I've just met her. gone away on holiday but miss her
Second verse, we've just got married....the postcard is to friends....
Third verse, post-divorce.......
Only the name has been changed to protect the guilty......!
Vic.
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
I never believe that lyrics should rhyme, let limericks do that.
But I did find it hard to pick up any kind of melody reading this.
But it was a good read, 3 letters in one assignment.
Triple Points (show off)
Find all you need in your mind, If you take the time
LMAO, thanks Spadge.....
er.....for the "pre-verse" bit, thought it would be nice finger-picked - D,C & G.......for the verses, first 4 lines would be D/Dsus4 and A/Asus4 then for the next 2 lines, G, A & Bm....next to last line,C/Csus4, last line A/Aus4......if that makes any sense.....
I had a hard time fitting this to any kind of rhythm myself, sounded good in my head when I was writing it, not so good playing it back on guitar till I came up with the above chords.....
And there are lots of gaps,,,,,,,,it needs work, at the moment it's just a draft......
If I get another few mins to spare this week, I'll work on it....
Vic.
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
Hiya, Vic,
I really like the flow of this one. Like the story, especially. I agree with Spadge that the meter is a bit tough to pick up. I disagree about the rhymes though. A good rhyme scheme can really add to the lyrics, and make them much easier to remember. In any event, good work, as usual. I'm hoping you get those extra few minutes this week, as I'm curious to see how this shapes up.
-- Scratch 8)
-- Scratch 8)
"...if heartaches were commercials, we'd all be on TV" -- John Prine
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why didn't I see that? read it again, makes perfect sense now;)
also had a go on your chords...though I didn't strum the exact chords(what the hell all these sus and 7 etc. ...could've looked them up but...too lazy)and they work very well for me;) even found a rhythm. and do you speak or sing these 'pre-chorus' things?
I even like it more now:)
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
Hmmm.......that's an idea......the pre-chorus thingies......well they're actually a sort of intro to the verses, but yeah, I think they would sound good spoken rather than sung.....
As for the sus4th chords, really they're just a way of adding colour to a riff.... for a major chord, you'd use the 1st 3rd and 5th notes of that particular scale.....i.e in D you'd use D, Gb and A to form a D major chord...for a sus4th, you'd use the 1st, 4th and 5th notes of the scale, so for Dsus4th you'd use D,G and A............
Dmajor...........Dsus4
E A D G B E.... E A D G B E
2 0 0 2 3 2.....2 0 0 2 3 3
Amajor...........Asus4
E A D G B E.... E A D G B E
0 0 2 2 2 0.....0 0 2 2 3 0
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
:idea: ah, thanks for explaining....I usually looked those chords up in my book but didn't bother with the meaning or how they are formed.
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
