I did not set out to write it this way but this has ended up becoming my "let's just be f&*k buddies" song. It took 15 minutes including a trip to the fridge. After that, I started on a rockin' protest song...why can''t nights like this happen more often?
(Perfect) In The Dark
By Chris Courtney
© Copyright Chris Courtney 2008
Sitting on this moonless night
Wondering why we
Never got it quite right
And then I saw a star above
And ask how we came apart
When push came to shove
Oh sometimes love is not enough
We're just not the same
Tried to make it work but
Its better this way
And I don't want to say goodbye
Hold onto me for one more night
We're so perfect in the dark why don't we
Get on in the light
I'm just too tired and I
Don't want to fight
And I don't want the sun to rise
‘Cause then its time to face the lies
Just let me stay so I can
See your eyes
Under this perfect
Night
I love this line:
We're so perfect in the dark why don't we
Get on in the light
It brings the whole story together.
And yeah, it seems like they write themselves sometimes, doesn't it?
Falling in love is like learning to play the guitar; first you learn to follow the rules, then you learn to play with your heart.
Hi Chris
Not sure how you hear the music on this, so take this suggestion with a grain of salt...
Reading it, I was thinking that this stanza might be better (a) joined and (b) reversed, like this:
We're so perfect in the dark why don't we
Get on in the light
I'm just too tired and I
Don't want to fight
And I don't want to say goodbye
Hold onto me for one more night
Taking it this way, as Kathy mentions, it really holds the soul of your lyric and would make a good chorus.
Just a thought.
Looking forward to more.
Peace
Kat and Dhodge,
Thanks so much for your thoughts! I was going to fiddle with the melody tonight but your suggestions are so good, I'll give them a go.
Peace,
Chris
Hi Chris,
yeah good song mate. Those lines that Kathy mentions for me are excellent and critical to this song. I half agree with David in as much as I a bit of reversing and combining would make a great chorus but I would tend to put those 2 lines the end of the chorus, because of their impact, something like:
And I don't want to say goodbye
Hold onto me for one more night
I'm just too tired and I
Don't want to fight
We're so perfect in the dark why don't we
Get on in the light
just some more food for thought
cheers
Paul
Okay, I'm changing my mind - I definitely like Paul's arrangement of lines better than mine!
Collaborated efforts are fun, no?
Peace
Paul, Kathy, dhodge,
Thanks so much for your ideas! I ended up taking Paul's advice and here is how is turned out:
http://www.myspace.com/courtneychris
I may rework it again later by working a repeat of the key chorus, play with a bass and drum kit but for now this feels just right.
All the best,
Chris
I'd leave the bass and drums - sounds like it was meant for solo guitar and voice, anything else would detract from the stark simplicity of the lyrics and chords. Sounds good to me, although the stop/start sections threw me a little at first.....
Good effort. I think that's the first mp3 of yours I've heard; I'll check the others out later.
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
