SSG Week 27 - Limitation 27

Hi NEZTOK,
I like this song a lot. For me it reads in a slow rhythmic way like a slow heartbeat. Which is in keeping with the mood of the song. I like the “glimmer of hope” verse (I'd have to say that wouldn't I) but I see what you mean with the last chorus. But nothing lasts forever does it. Great job :D .

hey ya.

first of all great choice of topic. yes, 27 seems to be the age(say kurt cobain, jim morrison, janet joplin...). so that alone had my attention right away. I absolutely love the first two verses and choruses. then the last bit when it turns around, it ...well... I know what you mean and it's a clever idea and all that, it's basically these few lines here that sound a bit plain, I think:
I met a girl and we got married.
I hope I didn't sin and I'll be forgiven.
[...] and be a dad.
it's ok, the only thing really bothering me(just the way it sounds) is 'and be a dad'. wouldn't know how to make it any better, though.
I'm probably being nitpicky(probably?surely.)- so just ignore me;)

otherwise I'm really fond of this song.
(and isn't it a glimmer of hope that the person didn't commit suicide in the end? well, one could argue what's worse....)

congrats.
cheers,
bluenightangel

...it's basically these few lines here that sound a bit plain, I think:
I met a girl and we got married.
I hope I didn't sin and I'll be forgiven.
[...] and be a dad.
it's ok, the only thing really bothering me(just the way it sounds) is 'and be a dad'. wouldn't know how to make it any better, though.
I'm probably being nitpicky(probably?surely.)- so just ignore me;)

Yeah I know, I hate that verse. Blame it on pbee. :D

Hey, Im just the piano player.

pbee, just a joke. Keep the suggestions coming. I welcome the input.

No offence taken, actually I cant play the piano anyway :D .

:D

bluenightangel