Dear Good Friend
(Verse One)
Dear good Friend,
Is something wrong?
Been gone so long,
Where have you been
(Verse Two)
It's common belief,
Friends stick together,
Through thick and thin,
Where have you been?
(Verse Three)
As it turns out,
You weren't there,
When I needed you,
Where have you been?
(Chorus)
We all need someone,
By our side,
Someone to rely on,
To help you get by,
(Verse Four)
Dear good friend,
I got your letter,
My dear friend,
I wish I was better.
(Verse Five)
I was wrong,
All along,
Please forgive me,
It's been so long.
(Verse Six)
It was so sudden,
I was so confused,
It happened so fast,
I didn't know what to do!
(Chorus)
We all need someone,
By our side,
Someone to rely on,
To help you get by,
(Verse Seven)
One more chance,
That's all I ask,
Let's Start fresh,
Forget the past.
No matter what anyone says, these four men were the Innovators! of modern Rock & Roll!
Morse Code... Music on it's own
it's a pity you couldn't work the "where have you been" line at the end of the first verse, rather than the middle.......would have had a nice sense of continuity then....
the verses are nice and tight, scan well...I'll go back to the point I made a couple of weeks ago about spit and polish, all this needs is a little fine tuning, a little extra tidying up.....this strikes me as 90% of a song, just needds that little extra dressing.....
Vic
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"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
hey bst,
certainly is a good letter. it does have a light air to it. i do like the form of letter and reply to it. i don't like the fact that you used the line "Where have you been?" to end 2 verses back to back. just a little redundant. the song does flow nicely. a litght little diddy this week. nothing really grabed my in the song or stood out as anything worth mentioning.
-CheapThrill
Bst,
Nice song. I like the way you have the one letter then the response.
I must agree with Vic about the old Spit & Polish. This could really shine
Celt
hey bstguitarist
Not much to say about this except I too like it.
And as Vic said
it's a pity you couldn't work the "where have you been" line at the end of the first verse, rather than the middle.......would have had a nice sense of continuity then....
Why not just swap line 2 and 4
Dear good friend,
Is something wrong?
Been gone so long,
Where have you been?
Just a thought.
Tokai 12 String
Don't you ever give up on yourself
Cyruse's post inspired me to fix this and rearange it. I put the where have you been in a few different places. Take a look, I gues this could be last weeks assignment.
No matter what anyone says, these four men were the Innovators! of modern Rock & Roll!
Morse Code... Music on it's own
