Hi all,
Finally catching up. This is a quickie that I wrote . . . . . still needs some work . . . . . any suggestions appreciated. Thanks.
http://www.soundclick.com/neilstuart
DANCING ON TREE TOPS
I'm dancing on treetops, I'm flying with the wind
don't know where I'm going
don't care where I've been
I spent my mornings trying to wake up
spent the noon trying to see the light
spent the evening trying to understand
and my nights trying to do what's right
Now I'm dancing on treetops, I'm flying with the wind
don't know where I'm going
don't care where I've been
I spent my days wondering who I was
I spent my weeks pondering who I was not
I spent years searching for who I'd become
I spent my life searching for my lot
Now I'm dancing on treetops, I'm flying with the wind
don't know where I'm going
don't care where I've been
I spent the summer in the sunlight
I spent the fall wondering where to go
I spent the winter in loneliness
I spent the spring trying to grow
Now I'm dancing on treetops, I'm flying with the wind
don't know where I'm going
don't care where I've been
well - what can I say - love it!
OK it's just a simple three-chorder, but sounds pretty good to me......
A couple of tiny criticisms.....last line of the chorus, you might try breaking up the pattern a little by going down a couple of semi-tones .....sounds like D and G with a couple of variations, for the last line try something like
"(Cadd9)Don't (G) care where I've (D) been.....
and the other tiny criticism? I didn't see you dancing in the pic you posted on soundclick........
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
second thoughts.....there was something niggling at the back of my mind.......
1st verse.....mornings/noon/evening/night.....nice logical progression through the day...
2nd verse....days, weeks, years, life - again, a nice logical progression through life.....
3rd verse....summer, fall, winter, spring.....nice progression through the seasons.....
BUT......
if you swapped the second and third verses around, it would be even more of a logical progression through life.....
1st verse.....mornings/noon/evening/night.....nice logical progression through the day...
2nd verse....summer, fall, winter, spring.....nice progression through the seasons.....
3rd verse....days, weeks, years, life - again, a nice logical progression through life.....
a day, a year, a life....now they seem to be in the right order, n'est-ce pas?
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
Thanks Vic,
I too was having a problem with the verse order but you've logically worked it out for me and I DO appreciate it.
Okay, here's the update with the bridge added, as well as those great suggestions of Vic. Lemme know what you all think. Thanks.
http://www.soundclick.com/neilstuart
DANCING ON TREE TOPS
I'm dancing on treetops, I'm flying with the wind
don't know where I'm going
don't care where I've been
I spent my mornings trying to wake up
spent the noon trying to see the light
spent the evening trying to understand
and my nights trying to do what's right
Now I'm dancing on treetops, I'm flying with the wind
don't know where I'm going
don't care where I've been
I spent the summer in the sunlight
I spent the fall wondering where to go
I spent the winter in loneliness
I spent the spring trying to grow
Now I'm dancing on treetops, I'm flying with the wind
don't know where I'm going
don't care where I've been
and as I dance upon the tree tops
my feet never touch the ground
and as I fly with the wind high up in the sky
I'm grateful for the freedom I've found
Cause I spent my days wondering who I was
I spent my weeks pondering who I was not
I spent years searching for who I'd become
I spent my life searching for my lot
Now I'm dancing on treetops, I'm flying with the wind
don't know where I'm going
don't care where I've been
Hey Neil
I like the added bridge and Vics suggestion really does put the events in life in a better perpective .
Another goodie Neil
cheers
Trevor
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
I think the song sounds great. Nice work!
