Tried this with Em, Am and Bm with some playing about with the 3rd fret of the B and top E strings [D and G] in the Em and Am bits for variety. A bit basic, musically, but I'm new to this lark!
Siren Song
Should have known better, and never let her through the door,
Well I should've known better, never let her through my door,
But that siren song lured me, back to those bad old days once more.
Couldn't see clearly, like a spell was cast on me,
I couldn't see clearly, an evil spell was cast on me,
Her siren song bewitched me, and would not let me be.
Summer moves to Winter, my wife and family are gone,
Said Summer moves to Winter, all my family is gone,
That siren's song moved me, but even she has now moved on.
Wish I'd known better, and never let her through my door,
I wish I'd known better, never let her through the door,
That siren's song has ruined me, left me empty to the core.
Welcome to the Sunday Songwriters Group, David. You've got a wonderful first song post. For a moment I thought maybe John ("the Celt") or Mike ("PoRR") had posted under a different name :wink:
I really liked the third verse and the double use of "move" in the last line. Nice play there.
Only suggestion I'd make is maybe in the last line of the third verse, maybe like this:
Her siren song bewitched me, and it still won't let me be
simply to give it a little more power in the present day. Just a thought.
Looking forward to reading more from you in the future.
Peace
Hi David,
Welcome to the SSG forum. Excellent first post. I like the double metaphor of Summer moves to Winter as a way of describing time and your emotional situation. I might be inclined to tweak those lines just a bit though, maybe,
But Summer's moved to Winter, my wife and family are gone,
Said Summer's moved to Winter, all my family is gone,
That siren's song moved me, but even she has now moved on.
and possibly and alternative to the last one
That siren's song done moved us, and even she has now moved on
Anyway just my thoughts, great job
Paul
Hi there,
I like it.
Also seems like the accompaniment you had in mind fits my level of playing.
can you post a tab to show what you mean by . . . playing about with the 3rd fret of the B and top E strings [D and G] in the Em and Am bits
Cheers
Ola
“Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. And all you can do is go where they can find you.” - Winnie the Pooh
Ola,
I've had a go at the tab in the SCG section. Istruggle with a clean Bm barre when fingerpicking but strumming is more forgiving!
David
I just sang it to myself and it sounded pretty good. I did have some trouble getting the words "never" and "evil" out smoothly, so you might want to look at revising those sections a bit. Good song though, I am off to find your tab and try my hand at this.
. . . Thanks David. Im right behind you DrunkRock :wink:
“Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. And all you can do is go where they can find you.” - Winnie the Pooh
