This song is about "getting from here to there" - sort of :wink:
Actually this song began as a result of a conversation with a poet friend of mine who like me has been suffering "writers block" and we decided that that most difficult part of all was was just starting it. Not the greatest song ever but hey Ive written something :D yay.
http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=11563488
The First Step
© Copyright 2012 Paul Brady All Rights Reserved
The first step is the hardest it's the hardest step to take
But it's the only the only one you can make
It takes you from here
Gets you to there and it
Leaves you with another one to take
The first step is the one it's the one before the next
And when you take it you're left with all the rest
It takes you from here
Gets you to there and it
Leaves you with another what do I do next
So step down the line
In sequence and time
Each step is the first one in its time
Like the bullet roulette
It hasn't happened yet
The moment waiting for you to define
The first step is the hardest it's the hardest step to take
But it's the only the only one you can make
It takes you from here
Gets you to there and it
Leaves you with another one to take
Yeah it takes you from here
Gets you to there and then
Leaves you with another one to take
Hi Paul,
Good start :D Clear and straightforward and kudos for just doing it!
Suggestions:
Maybe this could come across more positive--"Leaves you with another one to take" > "Leaves you one less to take"
You could build on the framework to make the lyrics more enticing.....
v1 The first step is the hardest it's the hardest step to take
v2 The first kiss is the sweetest it's the sweetest kiss to take/make
---------or you could take the song into a creepy psycho mode
v2 The first kill is the hardest it's the hardest one to make
---------or you could start off sweet and branch off into creepy psycho mode.....well you get the idea :roll:
Thanks for sharing :D
James
Man Soundclick is really really not mobile friendly. I'll have a listen when I get to the office later. But, love that you've written a song about the writing process, as a branch of the assignment/exercise. I'd encourage you to develop it further per James' suggestions. It would let the song 'go somewhere' and be a less static subject. Great job on the lyrics, can't wait to have a listen
It's a good take on an old adage. Well done. Hope that writers block gets bulldozed. I've had one myself.
Hmmm - I like it as it is.
I don't think it needs to go anywhere. Its about that moment before you start - so it seems right that the whole song is rooted there. And I like that the steps leave you with more steps to take - that emphasises how its only the start of a long process.
Really like this song!
Cheers,
HagRider
James I think I would go down the psycho road if I went anywhere with it, maybe around fear and anxiety over the first one and perceived hoplessness cos the next one is just another first one (each day is the first day of the rest of you life kind of theme).
Stephen, yes I agree that it needs to go somewhere if only in terms of commentry on the situation along the lines of the above. I still want to end up at the place it started i.e. "I still have a step to take"
Thanks MrE "Hope that writers block gets bulldozed". yeah me too.
Hagrider - "..the whole song is rooted there" thanks yes thats was what I had in mind.
cheers
Paul
