ARRRGHHH!Its unsingable!!! I know how I want it to go, but it just sounds terrible and twee. EEEEEEEEEKCan see that at least two big chunks of it are ...

wasn't it 27 last week? I have labelled my this week as 28...

It is ambiguous. Yes its just one person, but covering the full range of him, her, undefined.Its intended as a playful ditty on gender-queer issues - ...

hate to be fickle - but I think its TOO eastern now - which doesnt sit right with the vocals. I much prefer the first version. I think my preference w...

Dunno - I think no one else seems to hear him works ok. I would see it as being from his point of view that nobody else seems to hear - ie its why he...

I especially like the rhythm of the chorus words - train rhythm. Excellent

nice Dylanesque vibe. And a great story. Melody might need a bit of variation somewhere just to make the ears prick up and pay attention.

The tweaks have really polished it. I really like it - and the lyrics flow really well with the melody.

listening on soundclick now - ooooh its lovely!

The honed version is way way better - its interesting how songs develop and they're revised. It hangs together as a good story now - and is something ...

I like it - I like the way the tune bounces along. Its not how I expected it to sound but I think it works well. You could put more eastern flavour in...

I realy like this. I can practically see him. Its a very sad song - without being maudlin. Well done!!The only line I would slightly question is "make...

I'm not totally sure what its about either at the moment. Its evolving. I think it is currently about loving something but not being able to keep it. ...

I think its probably going to be two different songs to be honest. Will probs ditch the verse bit & use it some other time.Thanks for the feedback...