Ms. Lily White
She was a looker, the best in the land, she had seven men she kept in hand
In the middle of the night and during daylight the divine Lily white
Doc would arrive on a Monday at dawn, with his little black bag, looking worn and torn
From working all day but she had a way Lily knew what to say
Tuesday she would throw all her flowers away, as her man with the allergies came her way
Sneezing everywhere without a care cos his Lily was there
On Wednesday it was Grumpys turn, but Lily would make him laugh so he would return
With an awful frown eyes to the ground back to the best girl in town
Happy was her Thursday treat, this little guy was ever so sweet
With his wondrous grin and legs so thin Lily adored him
Friday was always a hard working night, trying to put at ease her bashful knight
He would always turn red and turn his head when she undressed for bed
Lily had Sleepy next in store, after all her hard work the night before
Saturday was easy night a sleepy delight for Ms. Lily White
Sunday was Dopeys special day, not very clever but he sure had a way
Of making Lily smile with his unique style for Lily he woud walk a mile
So we have a looker and seven males, now we need a moral to our little tale
Of Lily White whos busy tonight wrong or right
Well she thinks variety is the spice of life, even though all the men want her for their wife
But that would not do cos there are too few with Ms. Lilys point of view.
Not much imagery here but it was sure fun to write ;D
Go well
Jamir ;)
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This is very clever stuff, both yourself and Alpaca make the task look very easy. I might see if I can come up with something myself. Wednesday (the first line) was difficult when I sang it. Other lines were less troublesome and could be made to work quite easily. However, you may have a melody that already works fine. I ended up playing these chords over it:-
G / C / Am / D /
G / C / Am D G /
Richard.
I like it, very clever. And I agree, you do make it look easy.
Bizarre. Last year we turned Snow White and Cinderella into Heroin addicts. Now Snow White's a streetwalker.
I couldn't get hold of it as a song, but it was fun to read.
A :-)
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I have always felt that it is better to do what is beautiful than what is 'right'" - Eliot Fisk
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Thanks people,
think of a melody similar to the first few lines of The Ghetto ( Elvis Presley ) for those to young to know... for the first two lines . The third line has pauses between each phrase.
Go well
Jamir ;)
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Great job as usual! Those seven work together in the diamond mines all day. Doesn't that cause a bit of jealousy on their part? Can't imagine them all keeping it a secret from each other.
The last time a film crew made it into their mine, it was tremendously brilliant with sparkling gems, so I imagine Lily would be foolish to marry any one of them, at least from a financial standpoint anyway. She's got a pretty good gig going, methinks.
He not busy being born is busy dying. - Bob Dylan (It's Alright Ma, I'm Only Bleeding)
The Elvis reference helped me understand your meter
intentions better. I really liked it. Had the feel of
a dirty joke that never got dirty. I think thats a compliment. :-/
Yeah - the Elvis clue helped heaps.
A :-)
"Be good at what you can do" - Fingerbanger"
I have always felt that it is better to do what is beautiful than what is 'right'" - Eliot Fisk
Wedding music and guitar lessons in Essex. Listen at: http://www.rollmopmusic.co.uk
Poor Bashful got left out!! Â :'( Â Â But then again, you've got to have room for Prince Charming, no?
I particularly like the line "Happy was her Thursday treat" for some reason. It just clicks.
Peace
Read again David, "friday was her 'Bashful' knight. She just didn't capitalize it so it doesn't stand out. ;)
He not busy being born is busy dying. - Bob Dylan (It's Alright Ma, I'm Only Bleeding)
That's what I get for reading these things when I'm still asleep.... ;)
Anyone got a rock I can crawl under for a while?
Peace
Please excuse my ignorance, but what do you mean when you say meter?
And again, great song Jamir
Hi'a All
Well the meter is the beat or rhythm that is costant during the song, for example
Mar y had a little lamb
Da de da de da de da
It's fleece was white as snow
De da de da de da
.... and as a brilliant Maxwell said Bashful was Fridays trick, no rocks needed David, we love you just the way you are !
.... a dirty joke that never got dirty. thanks for the compliment
go well
Jamir ;)
I am a cloud within a cloud http://www.justjamir.com
you can hear my songs at :
Very clever, great stuff... :)
