I'm interested in minimalism with respect to my song writing at the moment. The objective is to say lots with less, that's the theory anyway. This song is written with this in mind, so some feedback on whether I've achieved that would be really appreciated.
Be with me
© Copyright 2006 Paul Brady
Verse 1
Come sit with me and talk for a while
Come sit with me and bring your smile
Cos you know thats what I need
Come sit with me, sit with me
chorus
Stay with me tonight
Be with me tonight
Stay with me tonight
Be with me tonight
Verse 2
Come take my hand I want your touch
Come take my hand words aren't enough
Cos you know that's what I need
Come take my hand, take my hand
chorus
Stay with me tonight
Be with me tonight
Stay with me tonight
Be with me tonight
<instrumental>
Verse 3
Come give your heart like you used to do
I'll give my heart like I used to do
Cos you know thats what we need
Come give your heart, give your heart
chorus
Stay with me tonight
Be with me tonight
Stay with me tonight
Be with me tonight
Be with me tonight
Hey Paul
You will probably hate me for saying this but I read it over and over , everytime I kept getting ( ducking for cover here :wink: )
Mamas' and the Papas' version of "Leaving on a Jet Plane "
Hey I like that version sorry if you don't :?
As usual Paul great song , writting wise nothing here I can offer to alter
Verse 3 the " to do " could cause a problem but its' all how one sings it ( they tell me ) ...
Good to see your back in here again ..
I fly home Thursday night hopefully I can record this week end
and hopefully stay home this time >>>>
cheers
Trevor
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Thanks Trevor, its good to be back, and just as well I dont mind the Mamas' and the Papas' or your beers in my fridge would be going west mate :D .
Anyway to clear up any confusion Ive done a recording and it doesnt sound anything like them (I hope :wink: ).
You can find it here:
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=328886
cheers
Paul
wow wasn't I wrong
thats awesome Paul
well done mate
your most definely going to have to make a CD mate
trevor
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Hey I can't decide if I hear bob marley or the beatles but either way its awsome. The recording sounds great and I would totally sing this around a camp fire with some people with long hair and questionable moral fiber.
"And above all, respond to all questions regarding a given song's tonal orientation in the following manner: Hell, it don't matter just kick it off!"
-Chris Thile
Hey Paul, great job here mate, I love the repitition in the verses, it works SO well!
would totally sing this around a camp fire with some people with long hair and questionable moral fiber
Have to second that! :P
Pete
ETD - Formerly "10141748 - Reincarnate"
I'd sing this anywhere. It's a great song and people should love it.
The only thing I'd change, Paul, is actually a move to make it even more minimalist. I'd change the last line of each verse to "Come be with me, be with me..." simply because I like both the rhyme and the way that would set up the chorus.
Possible to get a "cheat sheet" of chords for those of us who would like to share it with the world next time one plays out?
Peace
Thanks for the comments guys.
Trevor, thanks for the encouragement I do appreciate it, BTW your beers are safe :lol:
Dneck, Im going with the beatles mate, that makes me feel real good.
Pete, I was hoping the repetition would work, cheers.
David, I like your idea, let me think about that, Ill play around with it for a while and see how it sounds, thanks.
For those that are interested here is the cheat sheet, if you play it please give me the credit. BTW I might not have named the chords correctly but the tabs are correct.Be with me
© Copyright 2006 Paul Brady
D (x2)-----------------D9-------G-------------D
---------2-----2--|-----0---|---3---|---------2-----2-|-----
---------3-----3--|-----1---|-------|---------3-----3-|-----
---------0-----2--|-2-0-2---|-------|---------2-----2-|-----
-----0-2-2-2-0----|-----0---|-------|-------0-0-2-0-0-|-----
-0h2--------------|---------|---2---|-0-0h2-----------|-----
------------------|---------|---3---|-----------------|-----
D/E (020032) ? Not sure what this chord is called
Em9 (002032)
D (000232)
Verse 1
D/E-----------Em9---------------D
Come sit with me and talk for a while
D/E-----------Em9---------------D
Come sit with me and bring your smile
D9------------------------G
Cos you know thats what I need
D/E---------------Em9------D
Come sit with me, sit with me
chorus
C---------G--D
Stay with me tonight
C-------G--D
Be with me tonight
C---------G--D
Stay with me tonight
C-------G--D
Be with me tonight
Verse 2
Come take my hand I want your touch
Come take my hand words aren't enough
Cos you know that's what I need
Come take my hand, take my hand
chorus
Stay with me tonight
Be with me tonight
Stay with me tonight
Be with me tonight
Verse 3
Come give your heart like you used to do
I'll give my heart like I used to do
Cos you know thats what we need
Come give your heart, give your heart
chorus
Stay with me tonight
Be with me tonight
Stay with me tonight
Be with me tonight
Be with me tonight
Thank you much, sir, for taking the time and trouble to spell that all out!
Now where's my guitar? :wink:
Peace
Hey Paul,
Great work. I'm not a minimalist by any stretch, so I was skeptical on first read, but once I heard it I was sold. That realy works.
Wish I could be more helpful.
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