Hi gang,
This is a place I visit regularly, if not daily. (more like weekly) But I thought it might fit. I don't think it's a song yet, more of a skeleton of the song I'd like to write, but my attentions have been demanded on a number of fronts this week, and before I knew it, it was Friday. So I posted what I have so far, in order to keep to my "something-anything each week" goal. Thanks for looking it over. I'll try to get some comments posted tonight or this weekend. (before Sunday)
Susquehana
Sitting on the river bank
Watching the dawn
There's a heron hunting breakfast
As the new day's being born
A flock of geese flies overhead
A nearly perfect V
I watch until they're out of sight
Still hear them through the trees
Oh Susquehana, I love to watch you flow
All the way from New York
To the Chesapeake below
I see where you're going,
I know where you've been,
But I've no way of knowing,
All the things you've seen
The river roars, the barges blow,
the honking of the geese,
In all this noise I seem to know
an almost perfect peace.
Oh Susquehana, I love to watch you flow
All the way from New York
To the Chesapeake below
I see where you're going,
I know where you've been,
But I've no way of knowing,
All the things you've seen
-- Scratch 8)
"...if heartaches were commercials, we'd all be on TV" -- John Prine
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Hi Scratch Monkey
First of all I will be totally honest , i had to google search the name and found some photos on that ..{ what a beautiful looking place }
And that is how your song reads you have set this tranquill beautiful spot in the world , I read it a few times and I was thinking was this really a place or a place with in your mind , as it is lovely .
{ even the name is beautiful }..Susquehana
Thanks for shareing such a wonderful song ..{ music wise what did you have in mind ? Soft picking maybe ?}
Cheers
Trev....
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Hi Scratch,
There's a nice flow to this (groan! sorry!) - I especially like the chorus - the only fault I can find is that in the first two verses, I'm looking at a haven of tranquility, a peaceful place - the third verse seems a little at odds with this - I'm now looking at a noisy river full of noisy barges....
Maybe if you used something like a lone bird calling, and the gentle hum of bees - worked that in so that bees would rhyme with peace? Just a suggestion.....
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
