I kind of feel like I am missing the mark on this one, but this just went in this direction. :?
I guess there were a couple of us that decided to use the phrase “Daily Grindâ€
I am not sure I am pleased with this one. I am open for any suggestions. Recording is still pretty new to me and this time it is pretty bad. I did try multi tracking but it just took to long and I wanted to get this posted tonight, so bear with me in the recording (and Song writing) learning curve. As per Vic's suggestion I did also post the lyrics. There is also supposed to be a solo in there but I did not have the time to record that one tonight.
Blessings
Olav
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DAILY GRIND
©Olav Gjerde 2006
Twenty miles of country roads
Past open fields and corn in rows
Heading to a little town on the other side
Passing by that old oak tree
Past the place that used to be
Our favorite place to open a bottle of wine
Far away from the daily grind
Go past the river bank
Where we used to walk hand in hand
Far from the problems of this world
Hidden by the hanging trees
Is a place where you and me
Could spread a blanket and unwind
Far away from the daily grind
Bridge/Instrumental
Twenty miles of country roads
Past open fields and corn in rows
Heading to a little town on the other side
Punched the clock at 8 am
This is where my path will end
Just like it have a thousand times
and it is back, back to the grind
Twenty miles of country roads
Past open fields and corn in rows
Hi Olav
Beautiful recording mate
Maybe if anything your vocals could be a tad / tiny little bit louder
Your very talented
Keep em coming mate
Trevor..
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Hi,
I was here three years ago, 'd like to come back. Yours is the first one I comment on. Hey, we're posting recordings today. Good! Because now there's ten times more to comment on. If this was mine and I picked it up for a review and improvement I would probably:
- Shorten the intro but how loveable!
- Find a solo/melody/riff for the bridge
- Leave out the sus4 most of the time
- Don't repeat the "Far away from the daily grind", that makes it more interesting.
- cut most of the "past" and "passing" from the lyrics
Best lines:
- Our favorite place to open a bottle of wine
- Could spread a blanket and unwind
- Punched the clock at 8 am
Mistake?
Just like it <have> a thousand times -> has/did?
Cheers!
Dieter
Great MP3 - I really like it! Vocals could do with being a touch louder....
Knotwilg makes a couple of good points...
- Don't repeat the "Far away from the daily grind", that makes it more interesting.
- cut most of the "past" and "passing" from the lyrics
but don't you dare mess with the sus4's! I'm a big fan of sus4's, use them a lot myself....I sense a kindred spirit....
Very nice guitar - chords and tone - what are you using? Sounds really thick and full, really nice tone.....
Again, Olav, lovely job.......
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
