SSG6 Wk1 - Montezuma - Can't Sing Blues

Hi Ola

This made me smile. Very cool.

I'd like to suggest going for a bigger laugh in the second verse, maybe something like this:

My missus takes a stroll when I start to play
My missus takes a stroll when I start to play
She says she feels much better when she's walked two miles away

Or something along those lines.

Another suggestion would be to flip the last two verses. This is a minor thing, but I think it gives a little more logical flow to the narrative. You could even begin the third verse with "But..." ("But I don't give a darn...") and that would set up a situation in the first two lines, followed by your reasoning it all out in the last two. Just a thought.

And you can't sing that badly... :wink:

Peace

Great stuff - like the first verse especially. Could have been written just for me [except for the dog. Can rabbits howl?]

Thanks for your comments.
Here is the revised (& better)version . . .

Title: The Cant Sing Blues

My dog starts howling when I sing the blues
Woo my dog gets to howling when I sing the blues
I'm darned if he don't sound better than I do

My missus takes a stroll when I start to play
My missus takes a stroll when I start to play
She says I sound much better when she's miles away

I don't give a darn cos I'm havin a ball
I say, I don't give a darn cos Im having a ball
Just me & my guitar . . . no worries atall

I can't play a tune & my voice is rough
Oh yeah, I cant play a tune & my voice is rough
But I love the blues, jus' cant get enough

Cheers
Ola

Good Job,

I like the revised version with one same exception.
She says she feels much better when she's walked two miles away

This line seems a bit long and could use some editing and I think instead of her
feeling it sholud be you sounding better.

Something like:
She says I sound much better when she's mile's away

John

Thanks John, you're right, your shorter version is a bit neater - i've edited it.
Ola