Hi all. Trying to recover from a severe case of writers block.
This song is about a friend of mine that used to me my landlord many years ago.......
Piano Through the Ceiling.
I was a child with a child
Not yet grown into my face
When I found myself residing
In a wonderful place
Where music filled the halls
And filled up every minute
Shook down through the walls
To everyone within it.
Shimmering on stage
While you sang of silver spoons
Trying to make the grade
You pounded out the tunes
But in the wee hours of the morning
You'd tip-toe up the flights
And sit down at the piano
To greet the day's first light.
Sitting in the dark
Baby at my breast
Living with decisions
That were marginal at best
Worried for the future
And scared down to my bones
I'd wrap myself inside the music
And fall asleep among the tones
Was it all just Fourplay
To the songs we sing today?
Or is it just a memory
That I won't let get away?
To look back almost thirty years
Sends my emotions reeling
But I do miss being lulled to sleep
By piano through the ceiling.
Falling in love is like learning to play the guitar; first you learn to follow the rules, then you learn to play with your heart.
Kathy,
Nice to see you back. I was wondering where you've been.
What a come back!
I was a child with a child
Not yet grown into my face
And the last verse is great! It really brings the whole
thing home in a very real way.
The only thing is I'm not getting a feel for the music.
What do you have in mind?
John
Hi Kathy, good job here. You must (have) really like(d) this person to put up with music coming through the ceiling in the early hours of the morning :lol: .
The only thing that I would suggest would be to change the last line of verse 1
Where music filled the halls
And filled up every minute
Shook down through the walls
To everyone within it.
To
Where music filled the halls
And filled up every minute
Shook down through the walls
And everyone within it.
I think that still retains your meaning but to me it makes it a stronger line, by personalising the experience, just my opinion.
Cheers
Paul
Well, this has to be a piano piece, I think.
I'll admit to be very much influenced by the new Elton John cd, which is a follow up 30 years after Capatin Fantastic. Anyone who likes early Elton will like this cd very much.
And as it's rather nostolgic, it got me to thinking about this weeks topic, and looking back not so much at chidhood, but the things that have kept me making music all this time. (these days my friend will have me come up and do a tune or two between sets at his gigs.)
So I'm thinking along the lines of one of Elton's ballads. I'm also thinking about using the 3rd verse as a bridge.
There are some inside jokes, so to speak, in the lyrics. Shimmering, and Silver Spoons are 2 songs the band used to do, and the name of the band back int he 70"s (ohgod, am I old!), was FourPlay.
Falling in love is like learning to play the guitar; first you learn to follow the rules, then you learn to play with your heart.
Kathy, this is really good, i like the story and how the inside jokes fit the song, nice third verse, great emotion, well done.
marty
sytys
HI
This is very good I like it ...
I was a child with a child
Not yet grown into my face
very well written and I know exactly what you mean ...
Babies with babies
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Lovely story, beautifully written.....
First couple of verses set the scene nicely, this is just great....
"Sitting in the dark
Baby at my breast
Living with decisions
That were marginal at best
Worried for the future
And scared down to my bones
I'd wrap myself inside the music
And fall asleep among the tones"
Only thing I'd disagree with, yes it would sound good as a SOLO piano piece - the lyrics are strong enough - but I think it might make a nice Gordon Lightfoot-style folk song, just a solo acoustic - maybe you ought to try it both ways, see which is best?
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
Hi Kat
I wish I could come backfrom writer's block like this.
Excellent use of imagery throughout which most people seem to have got right off. Fourplay made me smile - I just thought of four beats to the bar and for some reason it made me smile.
Again captured that wisfulness I was looking for in this assignment.
Great stuff - stick around
Bob :wink:
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