These both turned out very country/southern rock. Hmm, I guess it's my hillbilly music month...again. Here you guys go; I'm glad to try to get back into the thick of things.
Resevoir Road - Celt with the title and Blueline with the chorus
Shift's over
Lights off
Tired of running 'round that diner
Mom's put the babes in bed
She'll never make it through
That's what they said
Shifts over,
Torch off
Finally done as a trucker
Drives home to rest his head
He's a coward too
That's what they said
They both caught the light there on Reservoir Road
And for a brief moment they shared a passing glance
He saw a lifetime of sadness in her eyes
Sometimes, stories can't be told
They both caught the light there on Reservoir Road
And for a brief moment they shared a passing glance
She saw a lifetime of sadness in his eyes
Sometimes, stories can't be told
Before I met You - Title from katreich and dhodge with the chorus
Gotta play by your book
But it's so narrow in outlook
Try to get your leash on me
But I got back what you took
I never thought people were petty
But that was before I met you
Stab me in the back
And all I get is your attack
You are nothing but a cheat
And I got somethin' you lack
I never thought people were cruel
But that was before I me you
Thought I'd fall for your game
That'd I'd be calling you name
But in that cool summer night
I won't be the one in shame
I never thought people were stupid
But that was before I met you
I never thought people were petty
I never thought people were cruel
I never thought people were stupid
But that was before I met you
Hey DR,
Resevoir Road
love Resevoir Road, well done. Simple but effective.
Before I met You
I think youve done a great job with the structure here, I think that works well. I guess my only coment would be that for me its a little predictable, but hey it works, well done
cheers
Paul
Odd, I like Before I Met You the best out of the two... But I am glad someone likes my take on Resevoir Road. Can't wait to see the other songs.
Hey Drunk,
Good job on both! Your approach to Reservoir Road pretty much what I had in mind
leaving a bit of mystery. That said I think it could use a bit more of the story but
not too much.
The same goes for Before I Met You. I like what you have but could a little more.
John
Hey Drunk,
I like what you did with Reservoir Road, the way that the two stories are hinted at but never really told ( since some stories can't be told ). Good fit with the chorus.
I really like your take on Before I Met You, taking the lines of the chorus and using it as the last line of each verse. Also, great rhyme scheme. There are a few typos in the first couple lines of the 3rd verse, that make it hard for me to catch your meaning exactly, and a few places where you took liberties with the language to fit the rhyme, but still a solid effort.
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