SHE TALKS TO MY GUITAR
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Thanks to Mark for the inspiration . . . . .
she talks to my guitar
tells her things she won’t tell me
and I wonder, wonder, wonder, wonder
just what those things might be
she talks in a whisper
knowing that I can’t hear
and I wonder, wonder, wonder, wonder
if there’s anything I should fear
she talks to my guitar
the other love of my life
one I tell my deepest thoughts
the other is my wife
the other is my wife
are they taking sides
is it going to be two against one
and I wonder, wonder, wonder, wonder
if there’s anything to be done
I know that I’m in trouble
I just don’t know how much
and I wonder, wonder, wonder, wonder
if I’m starting to loose my touch
I know with one I can pull some strings
the other one I’m at a loss
I’m glad at least one listens to me
the other one I listen to, she’s the boss
she talks to my guitar
thank god, she doesn’t talk back
and I wonder, wonder, wonder, wonder
if they’re going to give me some slack
she talks to my guitar
that’s nothing strange, so do I
still I’m not sure what she’s saying
most likely she’s asking why
Why I talk to my guitar
Why I talk to my guitar
I talk to my guitar
Hi Neil,
Good start :D Nice delivery to boot :wink:
Suggestions:
"the other woman in my life".....could be "the other LOVE OF my life"
You got the assignment right by using he/she talks.......here's a case where I would bend the rule for the song's sake....
This other suggestion might seem like a major overhaul, but it would only take slight modifications.....consider changed the POV to "I talk to my guitar".......as it is it comes off a bit awkward with the singer wondering what the wife is saying but admitting he tells the guitar things he won't tell his wife....hypocritical.....
......or another way to balance out the thoughts......
consider replacing the guitar with a child in a strained relationship and talk about the "he says she says banter".....then put the guitar back into the song being a metaphor for the child.....maybe that's too deep, but it could be interesting.
Thanks for sharing.
James
Hi James,
Thanks. Changing "the other woman" to "the other love" makes perfect sense. Much better that way. And yeah, I did it for the assignment . . . . . "I talk to my guitar" is certainly a better approach and should provide more depth as well. Thanks for the suggestion. Working on it now. I'm sure David will forgive me.
Neil
A really good start. I think there's some inconsistency between verses:
are they taking sides
is it going to be two against one
she talks to my guitar
thank god, she doesn’t talk back
Renee
I thought the guitar strumming was distracting or somehow ill fitting. It's funny since the song is about the guitar itself. As much as I liked the driving pace in last weeks song, I didn't care for it in this one.
