hey... for me personally it's not very motivating doing similar or the same assignments over and over again(not blaming you, bob, I know you are busy, so it's okay), but hey... here's an attempt:
The floods passed
I've improved at hiding
Really, I've become an authority
You will never again find me
Wet from grief may it be rightly or not
This shaking marionette is dead
I've buried the wooden corpse
Beneath a moon who swore
Not to wake it with that gentle beam
Of his which so often kept this
Fool up..
Upset with the strings,
The fate self-inflicted
But this is the new age
Oh, your eyes shall never fade
And drift askew like they used to
Whenever they met a tear
Leading streams
Down my cheeks
Well, maybe it's me that I deceive
Still I choose to believe
You will never again find me
Wet from grief like they are from birth
...hope it's worth posting.
cheers,
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
this is great writing, really good imagery
Whenever they met a tear
Leading streams
Down my cheeks
so good, love to hear it
m
sytys
Hi Blue
I like this ..It is very good , the imagery is fantastic
Well done
ps
after spending all day Saturday recording one song ( started at 9 am finished at 10 pm )I will never say would love to hear it , as that really does alot of pressure on people , and time managment is something we all must learn .
well done again
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
Hi Blue
I think this was definitely worth posting, I like it.
These words here seem a bit awkward
Wet from grief may it be rightly or not
I wonder if it's a translation thing
I would have used this phrase:
Wet from grief be it right or not
I think youve struck a nice balance between abstraction and reality here well done,
Paul
Blue,
I agree with Pbee the word rightly
makes it stumble a bit .
Right would work just as well
Good Job
John
