Thanks guys!It's an up-tempo country-rocker.

You use good, strong verbs right off the bat to put us into the story:read / ran / scrubbed / opened I like the suggested revision "I'm waitin feelin ...

I'm the last one standin & he's lookin for dessert That was classic. You've got plenty of other good lines too -- it's a very visual piece; very ...

Yeah, you appeal to the senses well -- both smell and sight. And it's great that you brought it around by using the first line of verses one and two ...

This was brilliant. So many gem lines. The entire concept of "indigo blues" is great.The only thing I didn't get was the line "when you're afflicted...

Thanks guys!I too love Dylan's "Tangled Up In Blue," so when I was thinking of a "color" song I think I just sort of gravitated toward blue, and then ...

I like it -- especially with the music. I'm listening to it now for the second time.As someone else mentioned, I think the ambiguity is a good thing ...

"the whiteness blinds my vision struck by the dim light"I'm not sure I understand this -- unless I'm missing something, you should replace "dim" with ...

I like that you've put a new spin on an old proverb by saying "the eyes are a mirror" instead of "window." It's fresh, unexpected. You got a good so...