OK, I wasn't even going to bother this week - I've got a backlog of songs I want to record as long as my arm......
But Smokingdog posted one, and his 2nd line was "the eyes are a window to the soul" - or something similar - I prefer "The eyes are a mirror to the soul" so I wrote a song around that - sort of a blues rock thing, I'll try and record it sometime this week - I have a backlog of "Songs to do" that, if I started on them right now, would probably take me at least 2 weeks to do....
Anyway, here's this week's effort....
Black and Blue
I look in your eyes, they're as black as coals,
They say the eyes are a mirror, to the soul,
There's no hope for you, if that's true,
And I'm getting away away before I get the blues....
Look at your heart, tell me what you see,
Shades of the night, dark misery,
No colour there, just deep jet black,
And you wonder why, I'm not coming back....
Look in your little black book, what do you see?
A tick next to my name, you've made a loser of me,
You're so dark, and I need some different hues,
I need some colour in my life, not just black and blue....
Look in the mirror, tell me what you see,
Darkness, sadness and misery,
No shades of grey, just monochrome,
That's why you're so alone......
I looked in your eyes, they're as black as coals,
They say the eyes are a window, to the soul,
There's no hope for you, if that's true,
And I'm getting away away before I get the blues....
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(structure - 2 verses, bridge, verse, solo, verse...)
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Vic
OK, back to the guitar and audacity.....
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
cool 8) I think that works well, and is up to your usual standards. I don't see any problem here--the dog
By 'the eyes are a mirror to the soul', do you mean that looking into someone's eyes reflects what they see in your soul? As opposed to 'window to the soul' whereby you would be looking into their soul? Just curious...
buggered if I know, Martin - it just looked good when I wrote it down....
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Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
By 'the eyes are a mirror to the soul', do you mean that looking into someone's eyes reflects what they see in your soul? As opposed to 'window to the soul' whereby you would be looking into their soul? Just curious...
I never thouht about it, maybe the Celt should use that line in his vampire song :lol: It does sound good :D --the dog
Vic,
Very Good I like this.
A couple of suggestions though
In verse 2 you use the word black twice
Black as night, just misery,
No colour there, just deep jet black,
This seems a little forced to me
How about Dark as night or Cold as night
The same with the bridge
Look in your little black book, what do you see?
I think you could leave the black out and it wouldn't hurt
If you need the syllable you could use
Look "into" you little book
or
"And" what do you see
But what do I know?
John
PS I'll have to think about using that line Dog it could work
not to get too hung up on the eyes mirror the soul lyrics , I fairly sure that is an old saying .. meaning one can tell how honest you are by looking into your eyes ...
I could be wrong as I'm no expert on old sayings ...
I do agree with The Celt on the use of black though maybe his little alteration would be worth visiting Vic ?
however these lines stood out to me ( I really like them )
No shades of grey, just monochrome,
That's why you're so alone......
nice song well done
hilch
Here is to you as good as you are
And here is to me as bad as I am
As good as you are and as bad as I am
I'm as good as you are as bad as I am
I like that you've put a new spin on an old proverb by saying "the eyes are a mirror" instead of "window." It's fresh, unexpected. You got a good song out of it.
Hey Vic,
another good song here, it seems to me. Well done. When I read through, the only thing that struck me was the "Little Black Book" and speaking of latin :P in the other thread. You could as John says leave out the "Black" and allude to it with some thing like: "Look inside that little book" or "Look inside your little book" or even "Look at me in your book ..."
the last one has a bit of a double meaning.
Anyway good song.
cheers
pbee
Thanks for suggestions, I re-wrote the line entirely - as for little black book, I'm still thinking about that one - I could easily lose a syllable, but I like the way those words fit....
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Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
and now I'm going to take another couple of those VERY strong painkillers i got last night ....wow, vic in bed before 4 am!
night all .......
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Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
