Thanks guys :)I agree with both of you in part.I do like the suggestions you made james, I think the story got jumbled at some point there. Maybe I ca...

you could be a campaign writer That's a great compliment :DThanks for the comment, glad you like it. Must find the time to record, I reckon I'll have...

Nice explanation, instantly picked up on the raven reference, great poem.I think all up it works really well, great imagery and it has a nice feel to...

Haha, yeh this one was challenging to fit to the assignment.Chorus changed to the preffered 'we', I agree the other version was too judgemental.Thanks...

Hmm, this one was a strange one from you.I think you achieved your goal of writing a song like hers, but I'm not sure, these sorts of songs (I've writ...

Really like this one, great mp3 too :)Really easy listening, chilled mood, and yeh, perfect for a cafe gig heh.Perhaps doing something with longer ver...

Updated it a little bit, new verse and new final chorus :DI think the end is better now thanks to your suggestions. Thanks for the linking tip too ;)

Thanks for the reply :)Will look over it when I get home.Jay

Thanks for the replies :DHmm, perhaps third person about himself would work better, may scrap that last bit then...Johnny Cash vibe ey? :P Possibly, I...