All comments and opinion welcome.............
I've Had Enough
ã2004 Lucy Inkpen/Tricia Baker
Your time for drinking, Gave me time for thinking
I've been thinking, something ain't right
Your time for talking, Was my time for listening
I've been listening, for to much of my life
You can drink till you drown
I don't want you around
You'll always be a diamond in the rough
And I've had enough
Your time for taking, Makes it my time for giving
There's nothing more I can forgive
So it's my time for leaving, all your deceiving
Watch me honey walk out that door
You can drink till you drown
I don't want you around
You'll always be a diamond in the rough
And I've had enough
Bridge
I'm thinking, you're drinking, She's talking, You're listening, you're giving
She's taking what's mine
The dance is now ending, your nights beginning
You'll stagger your way home around dawn
When you start looking, you'll be surprised finding
Your bed wasn't kept very warm
You can drink till you drown
I don't want you around
You'll always be a diamond in the rough
And I've had enough
I‘ve begged and pleaded, never lied never cheated
Which is more than I can say for you
So it's my time for leaving, all you're deceiving
Watch me honey
Walk out that door
You can drink till you drown
I don't want you around
You'll always be a diamond in the rough
And I've had enough
Lucy :)
Lucy,
I really like it! The bridge in particular is excellent. It nicely... um... 'bridges' the two halves of the song as well.
I have actually spent time deliberately trying to think of something wrong with it, but I can't!
Good stuff again - I look forward to more!
G
Listen Louder Than You Play
The only thing about the bridge is this:
Bridge
She's talking, You're listening, you're giving
She's taking what's mine
I'm with you on the first part "I'm thinking, you're drinking" but then you go into 3rd person. Everything else in the song is 1st person.
Just a thought.
Good writing though. Good stuff.
Greg
I don't think I'm a lot dumber than you think that I thought I once was - White Goodman (Dodgeball)
Thanks for the comments guys, really appreciate it.
Lucy :D
Very good! Really! But isn't it a little bit long? How long does it take to sing?
Hmmmmmm not sure , gonna have to check it out.
I f we had to we could put a couple verses together and then the chorus.
But I'm thinking it's done fast, so it shouldn't be too long.
Lucy :)
