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Anonymous
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20 tin soldiers
all lined up in pairs
marching over carpet
marching up the stairs

that cat better watch out
we're gonna show him what it's all about

two soldiers in the lead
looking down the halls
watch out for his shiny teeth
watch out for his claws

that cat better watch out
we're gonna show him what it's all about

ten tin soldiers
marching down the stairs
all scarred from the battle
all covered in hair

that cat better watch out
we're gonna show him what it's all about


   
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sozay
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brothertupelo,

this is pretty cool. very fun song. I love the last verse, 'all scarred form the battle all covered in hair' very funny stuff.

good writing
sozay

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mr. d
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Very nice.

I can't decide if it's literally a song about toy soldiers tangling with a cat, or if that's a symbol for something like the Iraq war. What I mean is the soldiers go in all confident (like the US) and then suffer losses (Viet Nam the sequel anyone?).

That's how I interpreted it at least. That may not have been your intent in the least. But as you may be able to tell from my song this week war is a bit of a hot button issue with me.

Nice work,
Dillon

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Val
 Val
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So powerful in its simplicity.


   
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gjbrake
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Great stuff.

Good fun and a well-put message.
Would be less effective as either, without the other one.

If that made any sense.

Listen Louder Than You Play


   
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warkthogus
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I really liked your song, but I think that you need to come up with some other words for the verses so you don't repeat on the 3rd and 4th lines. Good song, though.

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