Better With You

Hi Joe,

Not sure why this has sat there for over a day with no comments?

I hope I haven't bored eevrybody away with all my rantings and mumblings. :oops:

Yet again you demonstrate your knack for writing songs that seem instantly singable and have a clear message. I was warbling along pretty much from the first line. 8)

I liked the lines about being a fool to think you could change someone (I've seen some monumental relationship failures caused by that one!) There's even an old joke about the bride's view of the wedding ceremony:

Aisle
Altar
Hymn

(say it aloud...)

I baulked a bit at "Perfect in every way" though. No she wasn't - she's bloody leaving, I wouldn't be admitting that!! :twisted:

I don't think I'd be able to croak out:

"I hope that
It's better
For you"

and make it sound sincere either..... :wink:

Cheers, Chris.

Hey Joe,
My only beef with this song is that for me there is too much repetition of the pre-chorus and chorus.
Id like to see you cull out some that stuff, and tighten it up, maybe like this:
I know we agreed
To go our separate ways
And I'm not tryin', no not tryin'
To make you stay

But before the sun rises
Tomorrow without you
I thought I'd take
This one last chance to say

Everything
Was better with you
Even I
Was better with you
And now I dread the next sunrise
Knowing it'll rise
Without you

And I know it'll get easier
With each new sunrise
When I've forgotten your smile
Forgotten your face

And I tried to make you better too
What a fool I was to say
That I could make you better when you were
Perfect in every way

So before the sun rises
Tomorrow without you
I thought I'd take
This one last chance to say

Everything
Was better with you
Even I
Was better with you
And at the next sunrise when tears cloud my eyes
I hope that
It's better
For you


Other than that I like it :D .
Cheers
pb