SSG Week 31- "Amphibian" w/mp3

This is really good, lots of meaning, and plenty of original twists to an old thought. It's pretty direct, because the metaphors you use aren't very abstract, which gives it a lot of structure so that it doesn't fall apart

*salutes marv* congratulations! you just used the word salamander in a song! now i get to figure out how im' going to use it! ARGH!

Really v good Marv, great to have you back, missed you !!!

This is my favorite part

Amphibian... have you forgotten where you came from?
Cause you went and set your feet upon dry land?
Well look at you now, the faithless thing you've become
Now that you're a man... now that you're a man

Excellent........... i am still sitting with my finger in my ear, saying no Bob not again !!!! :roll:

Go well
Ja'mir

ya, good job. Im still trying to figure out how im going to start on this weeks assignment. Man you guys can figure these ones out fast. Keep up the good work

That was entertaining! Nice work. Very good rhythm and the subject
is carried nicely through till the end.

this makes me think was evolution a good thing?
I don't Know. but it makes me think.
Great Job

Well Marv...,

Well done. Really quite <superlative, *3> well done. I don't know if you have any intention of recording this one, but it'd be interesting to hear. There are just so many styles to which this song lends itself. I read it with a sort of wallflowers / counting crows feel to it, but I can also see this in a Crosby Stills Nash & Young style. Or any number of others. The intro / ending to offset the verse / chorus is a nice approach. Favorite lines are in the second chorus:

"Amphibian... have you forgotten where you came from?
Did you make yourself the king of all you've found?"

I love the intro, and the meter in the first verse is very catchy. That verse is sort of conceptually staccato. It sets up a vivid visual montage. Really marv, the whole thing is just very good.

-- Scratch

Hi Marv

This is excellent. Very good theme and superbly written. Gripped me right to the end.

Excellent

Bob :wink:

Fantastic effort there. I think that what you are trying to say gets through loud and clear, and that in itself is an achievement. Maybe it's because I just saw Shrek, but the amphibian making himself king line brought the frog prince to mind...

I think I could hear this with the intro spoken over a primal drum beat in the background, with the music becoming progressively more complex as the song progresses, but again ending in simplicity to show the evolution/devolution described.

Here's my token nitpick: The second verse doesn't follow the quasi-rhyme scheme you established in verse 1 (ground/down) vs. (allure/fours) unless you mispronounce one of the word, which seems to be more and more acceptable these days ( a popular band rhyming "so" with "door" by pronouncing it "Do'" comes to mind). It also seems a little bit weaker than the first verse, but I can't really put my finger on what makes it so.

Keep up the good writing. Hope to see more of it.

Doug

Been on hiatus from the board lately... GN's own Pet came to visit and kept me occupied for a bit over two weeks and the band's been recording some new demo stuff which requires a great deal of my time and creative energy. This is the first of our new demo tracks.... more to come.

http://www.thehouseholdgods.com/Amphibian.mp3

"Amphibian"

Attuned to the simple world around you
The little puddle where you first learned how to swim
Until the day you put your head above the surface
And you breathed in....

Salamander swimming in the water
Reptile slithering on the ground
Another monkey swinging from the treetops
Decides he's coming down

Amphibian... have you forgotten where you came from?
Since you went and set your feet upon dry land?
Well look at you now, at the faithless thing you've become
Now that you're a man... now that you're a man

You bought what the other apes were selling
Drawn to the township lights' allure
Now the fish that learned to walk on two legs
Goes crawling on all fours

Amphibian... have you forgotten where you came from?
Did you make yourself the king of all you've found?
Keep that in mind and follow your momentum
Straight down.. follow it straight down

Amphibian... have you forgotten where you came from?
Since you went and set your feet upon dry land
Well look at you now, at the faithless thing you've become
Now that you're a man.... now that you're a man

-marv

Is it Morrisey?

Is it Peter Gabriel?

Is it Eddie Vedder?

No, it's our very own Marvelous Optimist.

Really nice work.

I have to say, wasn't all that impressed with your week 52 offering, but this is in a different class............absolutely superb!!!

Maybe the week 52 song'll sound better on mp3 than it does in my head...

:D :D :D

Vic

thats an awesome track, i liked it so much i checked out your website and other mp3s. all good stuff. let us know if u ever gig in the uk ;)