SSG7 - Week 43 - Tattooed Lady - *** MP3 ***

Hey - let me in too! :)

I liked that a lot Paul. Some good key words to fire up the imagination, a somewhat dark and brooding sense of mystery, and a feeling that there's some killer music just waiting to slip behind it...

You going to give us her phone number or what?.... :wink:

Cheers,

Chris

Nice imagery. The first verse is very strong, the second still strong, and the third kind of leaves me wanting more
verses to flesh out the story some more. There is alot here that could be fleshed out. Hm, no pun intended.

So my idea is more verses and less chorus or a shorter chorus, ie. drop a "tatooed lady" or two. Could draw out
the chorus lines to keep the chorus lengths and do verse verse chorus, verse verse chorus, verse chorus or
something. What do you think?

Well it's good stuff.

Chris, cheers mate,
a somewhat dark and brooding sense of mystery
yes I was trying to get something like that without giving too much away.

stickman, thanks your comments I think point to one of the weakness of this song. The chorus was written and put to music before the verses were written and to be honest I had a quite a bit of trouble integrating them. The chorus is quite mellow using (Cmaj7 and Bm) whereas the versus are harder using major chords. The third verse is definitely the weak one given that the song is more about what the ugly truth is doing to her head, than what the ugly truth actually is, I would agree some more verses would be nice.

Cheers
Paul

Paul,

Reads nice. :D almost haiku in nature...and that's a good thing :wink:
The lyrics almost beg to be left mysterious.

Suggestion:
As I was reading, I was assuming the singer was a guy wanting to date a tattooed lady....but then I started wondering what the singer would be like....Then another idea hit me...what if the singer was the tattooed lady and she was singing to herself in front of the mirror....full length or vanity mirror...your choice :P ...now that would be deep waters :wink:

Thanks for sharing.

James

Thanks James,
what if the singer was the tattooed lady and she was singing to herself in front of the mirror

Yes that's one of the interpretations of this song that I had in mind, well done.

Paul

I've recorded a demo here http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8025157 if your interested

Paul

Nice demo :)

I really like the lyrics, the whole "let me in"
Tatoos are only skin deep etc.... nice

Paul,

Sounds really nice :D Good fit of words and music. The only suggestion would be to play a 1/2 chorus the first time.

I imagine you have to be happy with the way this turned out.

Thanks for sharing.

James

I read, I listened, I liked... a lot

Nice balance, lyrics tell just enough to let you make your own story. Mysterious..yes..mysterious.

Rock on!
D 8)

Nice. The mp3 really helps me to get it. Thanks.

I like the chords for the chorus and the contrast with verses.