Let me first say, Wow. There are a LOT of posts on these last few assingments. This is awesome!
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There's a world out there with angels and demons.
A piece of peace with no stained shrines.
There's a place where the sun doesn't poison the skin.
A place where all my thoughts are mine.
Coruption with a side of corrode.
All that remains, a sunken road.
Hearts and minds for subtle sin.
Morally dead with lowered chins
I'm starting to believe there's no such thing as faith.
No such thing as a good day to die.
Nation after nation fall onto their fate.
Laugh after laugh, my smile is a lie.
Coruption with a side of corrode.
All that remains, a sunken road.
Hearts and minds for subtle sin.
Morally dead with lowered chins.
Dig and seek and search this wreck.
Uncover, unhide, release this mess.
This truth that hides, I never knew.
Rip and pull 'till I push through.
Undust this rotten verity.
And wonder how this came to be.
I know this word will become inert.
Kiss it goodbye and replace the dirt.
Coruption with a side of corrode.
All that remains, a sunken road.
Hearts and minds for subtle sin.
Morally dead with lowered chins.
When the richest of the rich
become the poorest of the poor.
When the pure and the clean
become the villians and the whores.
Find that remain. Find that scripture.
Try to expose what I could not.
Release those tidings. Release the true.
Don't reflect my ways and let this rot.
There's a thin fine line between hate and rage.
Now watch the line be crossed and break!
Hmm i wanst really sure what to think of this, i liked the language used and such but i was somewhat baffled at how to feel over it. i think i could maybe understand more if it was complete with music or something. Sorry i couldnt be more helpful :oops:
Well, I guess all of my songs really have a story behind them, and I dont tend to tell them in my songs. What I really want to say in this song is that the world is really going down the drain and I want to find something pure, but I know that when I do, I'll just let it lay there and not spred it.Undust this rotten verity.
And wonder how this came to be.
I know this word will become inert.
Kiss it goodbye and replace the dirt. This is what I meant by finding it. The last verse is explaining to someone else that when the world does go to hell, find what I have found, but don't just let it rot. I guess all of my songs need explanations. I hope I answered your question. Thanks for your reply!
There's a thin fine line between hate and rage.
Now watch the line be crossed and break!
Hi pierson,
I also think your use of words here is excellent. This verse caught me out at the beginning though,
There's a world out there with angels and demons.
A piece of peace with no stained shrines.
There's a place where the sun doesn't poison the skin.
A place where all my thoughts are mine.
I thought it should be without Angel or Demons because were talking about a special peacful place without all that stuff. But I guess the first line is about the bad place and the rest are about the good place.
This chorus is good
Coruption with a side of corrode.
All that remains, a sunken road.
Hearts and minds for subtle sin.
Morally dead with lowered chins
but I not sure about "Hearts and minds" line and how that fits the last one. Something like:
Coruption with a side of corrode.
All that remains, a sunken road.
Hearts and minds for subtle sin.
Walk morally dead with lowered chins
feels better to me. Anyway good job :D Well done.
Yeah pbee, I wrote the first line when I was really angry, so I wasn't really paying attention, so I think your part is better. I'll change it. Thanks! I'm not sure about the "walk morally" because I think it really means that everyone is already walking with imoralls, but I really meant it to be that everyone was imoral and it would ne imoral fpor people to ......... I dunno, I'[m drunk already from a graduation PARTY! sao I'm already drunk. Keep posting and I might return when I'm sober.
There's a thin fine line between hate and rage.
Now watch the line be crossed and break!
