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Dead and Gone
He’s squinting in the darkness
From the headlights blinding glare
Driving through the night
From Spokane out to Pierre.
Then it’s down to Wichita
To empty out his load
He’ll grab a nap and breakfast
Then it’s back out on the road
And his mamma calls son
When are you coming home
If you don’t come soon
We’ll all be dead and gone
Well he’s Mr. Independent
And he works just when he wants
He has seen the whole damn country
From Nevada to Vermont
When he wants some company
He pulls off for a spell
To share a dance or drink or two
With some local truck stop belle.
And his mamma calls son
When are you coming home
If you don’t come soon
We’ll all be dead and gone
His eyes are red and bloodshot
From the smoke inside the cab
His back aches from the sitting
And his muscle’s turned to flab
He’s humping to make up for time
Lost on the interstate
Running on caffeine and spit
And still he’s running late.
And his mamma calls son
When are you coming home
If you don’t come soon
We’ll all be dead and gone
And his mamma calls son
When are you coming home
If you stay out too long
We'll all be dead and gone.
K Reichert 2/4/2013
Falling in love is like learning to play the guitar; first you learn to follow the rules, then you learn to play with your heart.
Wow! It's been a long time since I read something where the imagery and words chosen flow so well. I really, really like what you've written. I have one idea . . . . what if you held back a bit about sayingIf you don’t come soon
He’ll be dead and gone
and say something like
If you don’t come soon
you might be late
and keep the expectation and mystery of "late for what?"
then . . . . change the following
He’s humping to make up for time
Lost on the interstate
Running on caffeine and spit
And still he’s running late.
to
He’s humping to make up for time
Lost on the interstate
Running on caffeine and spit
some things don't wait.
and then kill the old man off.
It's a little less obvious. But, whatever, it still doesn't detract from such a well written song.
Thanks, again.
Neil
Thanks for the comments Neil! I went with something a little less specific. Once I started playing and recording, the song just sort of took over.
It's up on soundclick:
Falling in love is like learning to play the guitar; first you learn to follow the rules, then you learn to play with your heart.
Hi Kathy,
I reads great :mrgreen: I'll have a listen once I can access soundclick.com again.
Thanks for sharing.
James
Hi Kathy,
reads and sounds great good work :D .
James I think Soundclick must do maintenance in the wee hours of the morning US time which often coincides with when Im on at night here and in the afternoon for you I guess.
cheers
Paul
Hi Kathy,
Sounding good :mrgreen:
Put a break/pause after "if you don't come home soon" [Break] we'll all be dead and gone [a capella] then back into the groove.
Soundclick must do maintenance Yes, It looks that way. :shock:
Sounds great, Kathy. Exceptional work.
Neil
What can I add? I have to agree with Chefie. This is a song to be proud of.
Renee
Thw entire song works nicely. Cudos
