This is sort of cheating for this week.. as I'd written this a bit ago based on a conversation with scratch... but I felt it worked very well for this weeks theme and I hadn't put it up anywhere. I'm having a busy week so I might not get to make a "real" submission for this week. So here it is.
"Turning Pages"
I'm up before the morning paper arrives
I can't bare to wake her, I just kiss her goodbye
Then its off to work again
Praying I get some time off this weekend
And i've got two children who barely know me
I get home long after all the bedtime stories
And i know they love me so
Just wish I didn't read it in a note
(chorus)
I'm just trying to keep up
With the turning pages
Each time I wake up
To the daily races
And when the day is done
I've already lost another one
Wish I could stop the setting of the sun
And all the faces in my family album
Are getting older, hope i still recognize them
When i get home tonight
Will they still let this stranger come inside?
(bridge)
And I've worked so hard for everything we have
This house, the cars and all the things like that
But sometimes I think I'd give it all away
If I could have a few more hours in the day
(chorus)
-Marv
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Hi'a Marv,
I like the concept, and can relate to this subject well, I can't however find a natural rhythm to this one , which is unusual, i can normally almost sing your songs as i read them !!!!!
Maybe I am having an off day here, can you help me out with the rhythm
Go well
Ja'mir :wink:
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Hey Marv,
Very nicely done. Takes a complex tangle of emotions and makes them easy to relate to. Addresses the theme of this weeks assignment well, and like Jamir, I think the cadence is a bit elusive, but you have a knack for making that sort of thing work out once it's put to music.
-- Scratch
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"...if heartaches were commercials, we'd all be on TV" -- John Prine
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hey marv
it's pretty cool and the subject&so on seems very familiar to me
I love the chorus
and I don't have a problem seeing this getting into music
see ya
bluenightangel
"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin
Hi Marv
Pretty good submission certainly meets the asignment quite neatly.
I'd be tempted with the last line of the bridge to change it to
For a few more hours every day
Just rounds it off to me.
Good stuff
Bob :)
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