WELL SORRY, I KNOW I DIDN'T GET INTO MUCH (ANY) IMAGERY ABOUT TECHNOLOGY ITSELF, BUT THE “INTERNET†WAS INCLUDED IN THE DESCRIPTION OF THE ASSIGNMENT, AND I GUESS THE ACTUAL TECHNOLOGY ITSELF HASN'T MADE AS MUCH AN IMPRESSION ON ME AS THE EFFECT IT SCARILY HAS ON OTHERWISE INTELLIGENT PEOPLE. THIS WAS WRITTEN ABOUT SOMEONE I KNEW, AND ORIGINALLY MEANT TO BE A BIT MORE SERIOUS, BUT I GUESS MY ATTITUDE ON THE WHOLE CHATTING/CYBERING THING, COUPLED WITH JUST HOW RIDICULOUS SOME OF THOSE SCREEN NAMES AND SITUATIONS ARE, MADE IT, WELL... NOT SO MUCH.
CYBER ME
©2005JKovak
WELL SHE GAINED ANOTHER POUND, OH HELL
NEVER MADE IT INTO TOWN, OH WELL
DID SHE DO ANYTHING PRODUCTIVE TODAY?
IT'S GETTING SO SHE CAN'T TELL.....
THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN LIFE AND FANTASY
AS THE CHAT ROOM COMES ALIVE
AND SHE'S SUDDENLY KNOWN TO ALL HER FRIENDS
AS TINKERBELL_35
YEAH LIFE ON THE LCD
SURE BEATS REALITY
CAN BE WHO SHE WANTS TO BE
THEY SEE WHAT THEY WANNA SEE
AND THERE SHE'S SO WILD AND FREE
WHERE NO ONE'LL CARE IF SHE
GETS HOT WHEN WOE_IS_ME
SAYS..........
HEY BABY COME CYBER ME
OH SHE NEEDS A BIGGER DRESS, OH HELL
HOUSE IS SUCH A MESS, OH WELL
WOE_IS_ME MAKES TINK FORGET HER CARES
WITH EMOTICONS ON HIS DELL
BUT IM_THE_MAN IS SCORIN' POINTS WITH TINK
TELLIN' HER ALL HE FEELS
OH SHE UNDERSTANDS HIM SO MUCH BETTER THAN HIS WIFE
TOO BAD THEY CAN'T MEET FOR REAL
OH LIFE ON THE LCD
SURE BEATS REALITY
CAN BE WHO SHE WANTS TO BE
THEY SEE WHAT THEY WANNA SEE
AND THERE SHE'S SO WILD AND FREE
WHERE NO ONE'LL CARE IF SHE
GETS HOT WHEN WOE_IS_ME
SAYS...............
HEY BABY COME CYBER ME
LANDLORD'S AT THE DOOR, OH HELL
DINNER'S BURNED AGAIN, OH WELL
SEXY_VIC'S HAVIN' IT OUT WITH KITTY_KAT_KATE
FOR CYBERIN' WITH BABY_RING_MY_BELL
AND HORNEY_DUDE, WOE_IS_ME, AND I'M_THE_MAN
ARE COMPETIN' FOR TIME WITH TINK
SO EAT YOUR CAPTAIN CRUNCH, KIDS, AND GO TO BED
AND THOSE DISHES CAN STAY IN THE SINK
OH LIFE ON THE LCD
SURE BEATS REALITY
CAN BE WHO SHE WANTS TO BE
THEY SEE WHAT THEY WANNA SEE
AND THERE SHE'S SO WILD AND FREE
WHERE NO ONE'LL CARE IF SHE
GETS HOT WHEN WOE_IS_ME
SAYS.............
HEY BABY COME CYBER ME
YEAH HEY BABY COME CYBER ME
OH HEY BABY COME CYBER ME
Hey Joe,
I think you've captured the situation nicely.
ORIGINALLY MEANT TO BE A BIT MORE SERIOUS
It might be humorous on one level, but to me the humour is quite black, I think there's a little bit of Tinkerbell in us all.
Well done Joe :D .
pb
Hello Joe,
Very entertaining!
I like the humor but still you manage to make a valid point.
Celt
Hi Joe
ha ha ha :D :D :lol:
sorry but I laughed so much when I read this I think I work with person
as he is always telling me about this girl he is chatting to on the webb.
nice Joe very nice
:wink:
cheers
L.K :arrow:
Aghhhh
Not only am I a senior citizen
I'm now a bloody senior member
Are you people trying to tell me I'm old or what ?
over 700 posts ( I really do need to get out more )
Well done. Funny. Focused. Believable. Specific. Dramatic. Well rendered. And absolutely today. What did you have in mind for a musical genre? (One of my common collaborators always tells me that country works better for unfolding situational songs like you've set up here. I'd love to hear a cyber country song, and despite the apparent dissonance of that, the rest of your imagery absolutely works in that genre.)
There are almost no songs about technology on the radio or CD. (21st Century Digital Boy, by Bad Religion. How many more can you name?)
You nailed this. The one comment I would pass on is that your nom de Internets work better when read than spoken, because part of the kick/recognition comes from the underscores and presentation. It's a little less powerful sung.
SfDean.
Jazz isn't dead. It just smells funny--Frank Zappa.
Who smells funny now?--Jazz
GOOD POINT SF, BUT I THINK FOR THE MOST PART PEOPLE ARE SO FAMILIAR WITH THE WHOLE CHAT EXPERIENCE (IN ONE WAY OR ANOTHER) THAT THEY'LL GET IT. HOWEVER THAT IS A VALID POINT AND IF I THINK OF SOMETHING THAT WORKS BETTER SUNG THAN READ I'LL POST IT. THANKS AGAIN FOR YOUR INSIGHTFUL CRITIQUES. THEY'RE A GREAT HELP.
JOE